Writing Feedback / Traditional music is more important than international - 'takes us home' [3]

Question: There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we listen to music?Is a traditional music of a country more important than the international music of a country that is heard today?

Music plays an important role in our life,one can imagine life without music. Traditional music and International music are both important, they grab our emotions,engage us to differen levels and take us to different place.However,i would argue that traditional music is more important than international music.

To begin with, music is a form of entertaiment, people uses it to relax, it makes our happy mood even better and change our negative mood to positive mood. For instance, when i am in a bad mood, music helps me to deal with it, it relieves my tension.it is something to do when i have nothing else to do, and it helps fight my boredom.

in addition, traditional music should be valued more than international music because traditional music helps to reveal a country's identity,connect us to the past as well as the culture and custom of a country. For instance, listening to music about war helps us to know about the past. Also,in my country, we listen to traditional music on every special occassion, such as, marriage ceremony ,traditional events, end of the year ceremony and so on,However, it remains us our custom and the right thing to do,while international music is much more for fun and love stories.

Moreso, traditional music takes us back home, especially people who lives abroad or far away from their home.For instance, i am a nigerian and i reside in italy, i listen to traditional music such as oriental brothers, people's club of nigeria and so on when i am feeling homesick,it takes me back home and make me feel better

In conclusion, both music arouse our feelings,but i think traditional music is more important than international music.it gives us the real picture of ourselves, and teach us who we are and where we belong.

Pls i need some correction. help me out.

Writing Feedback / Food is easier to prepare; life's more convenient for people, save a lot of time [3]

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? use specific reasons and examples to support your answer?

With advancements in technology,food has become easier and faster to cook.People now use kitchen appliances such as toasters, microwaves, refrigerator to cook their meals easier and more conveniently. This changes has mades improvement in the life of people to a great extent.

First,this changes has made life so convenient and faster.People use microwaves to get their food done in few minues without going through all the proceeses involved in the preparation. People now store their food even the leftovers without going to the shop every day to hunt for food. For instance, i work and at times when i get home am so stressed and tired that i wonld have the energy to cook and that lead me going to bed without food. i looked so wornout and unhealthy. However, with the help of microwave and fridge,it is so convenient and easier for me to get my precooked food done in few minutes and preserve the leftovers without much stress.now i eat well, happier and healthy than before.

Moreover,it saves time, we all know that preparation of food is time consuming,For instance, prepareing the ingredients, washing and the cleanings takes a lot of time. Precooked food and the use of kitchen appliances such as microwaves, refrigerator, toaster have save people from this processes and can use their time to do other important activities such as playing games which helps to keep the brain at work,surf the internet and read their favourite books or even visit their friends.

Finally,People can be healthy as well because majority of the precooked food are label,the ingredients and informations are stated which helps people to chose the appropriate food they deserve.For instance, i go for low-fat food and it makes me healthy.

In conclusion, technology has really improved the well being of people and make it live easier,it has make life more convenient for people, save a lot of time they can put to do other important things and also keep them healthy as well for chosing the right food they deserve.

Writing Feedback / The educational process - Parents are the best teachers? [7]

To become a parents is what everyone aspires to. Child's love from the parents are undeniable, they are always there for you, to lead and to direct you, they never give up.Therefore, i agree with the above statement parents are the first and best teacher of all time.

First, parents begins the educational process in their children as soon as a child is born.they play an active part in all the stages of their lives and never stop teaching.For instance, when a child get to a stage of sitting, walking, speaking etc the parents are highly involved, they sacrifice part of themselves to help the child get confident and be independent.They held them in the hand and teach me how to walk,they speak so that they can repeat and lots more. I never forget my parents as the teach me the real lessons that actually matters in my life.

Secondly, parents are not perfect or professional teachers yes but they are most devoted and committed to their children they are eager to pass their knowledge to their children and willing to teach them how to behave well, they teach us the things we should do and things we should not do.They relationship between them makes the children feel so comfortable with them ( parents) to discuss issues and ask them questions because they parents are so committed to them than their teachers who just spend an hour or two with them at school.For instance, i feel so comfortable to ask my parents anything than any other person. Although, children do not get the academic lessons such as biology, geography etc from their parents,that is where the professional teachers comes in, but we leant the most important lessosn of life from our parents. when children behave properly, people will say that he/she has a good upbringing and they parents takes the glory and when they behave bad they parents also take the blame.Parents tries to show good example to their children because they know that one day they will become parents too.

Finally,parents help their children financially, they send them to school from primary to university level to get them prepared for their future career for them to have a successful and comfortable life, yet children never stop to discuss what they learn from school with their parents and ask questions,they feel comfortable with they answer because they feel their parents are more experience and better teachers and they can get the best answer from them.For instance,when i fail my class work i dont feel more relax until when i show it to my father at home he will explain to me why i fail it we will do the corrections together,then i will have a relax mind. The wonderful lessons we learn from our parents are the treasure we carry about althrough our lives, their love and affection never depart from us.That is why they remain the best lecturer of all times.

In conclusion,parents starts the teaching process in the early stage of their children,they are not professionls teachers yet they children feels comfortable in their teaching,what i admire most is their love and affections towards their children, no leave no pay slip yet they are there and never give up, i wear the great example i leant from my parents and that is the secret of my success in life, that is why i will forever vote parents as the best teacher of all time.

Pls could someone make corrections for me, i will really appreciate it.
Thank you.