Writing Feedback / IELTS : IN MANY COUNTRIES TODAY INSUFFICIENT RESPECT GIVEN TO OLD PEOPLE >... [5]

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Q : In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people . what do you think may be the reason for this. ? what problems might cause this in the society .

A : Contrary to the yester years where , aged persons are given highest priority and respect in the society , but now - a - days , in many countries older people are treated rudely and they are not getting required attention and respect. Keeping aside , for now , whether this trend is progressive or regressive , the reason why this is happening are found to be manifold .

Firstly , in my view, with the advancement of technology and human's busy life there is a huge change in people's culture and human relations . The human life has became more mechanical and stressful. They are not having enough time to spend time with their parents or grandparents who grew older with time . This loss of communication has adverse effect on human relations.

I think old people are the base and backbone of the country . They are the people full of experience and knowledge. They are the proofs and live evidences of all the changes going in the society . But , young people of present generation are in the opinion that old people are clumsy and old fashioned , and they are not much useful in this developed world, which is completely a wrong way of thinking .

Due to this kind of immature and inappropriate thinking and living habits , there will be adverse effect in the society . As every person will grow old with time and they will also have to face the same problem in their old age . Because , today's children are tomorrow's citizens and they are growing with this kind of negative and disrespectful behaviour towards old people. There will be a social imbalance and no proper guidance to their lives .

People should always respect the old persons and learn from their experiences and can guide their lives in a better way. Old people are like a lamp in darkness of your life. They show you the path and direct you with their experience to reach your destination without any hurdles. Even government should take necessary steps for them by providing special schemes and lead their life happily even in their last stage of life.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Should government hold all the responsibility of society or even people are respon. [3]

It is widely-held belief that Government should take care of all the issues in the society and public intervention is not important . But , at the same time there is a strong counter argument amongst some section of people that public should participate and give their helping hand for a better society. However , I personally subscribe to the view that public intervention also plays a vital role in shaping a better society .

It is generally believed that Government should take care of all the activities in the society . This is mainly because , people are afraid that if there is public involvement in general issues going in society , there is a huge chance , that certain laws are broken and some people may be misguided and do what ever they want . There might be a chance of parallel power growing opposite to government and rules of government. For example , there are several mafia groups which resolves land issues or conflicts between people , by taking law into their hands.

On the other hand , there are certain group of people who vehemently contend that , every individual in the society should put their hands together for the betterment of society . One of the main reason why this view is held is that , government can't come to each and every individual every day and satisfy their needs and resolve their issues . Every citizen should feel responsible and take care of other citizens around them and help them . For example , there might be a emergency operation case for a patient where he needs to be treated on spot , and to sanction money from government it has lots of procedures and approvals to be done from authorities . It will be too late . In such situations people around him can volunteer and fund him and save his life. Similarly , there are numerous cases and issues where government can't help immediately . People around him should feel responsible and with humanity lend their hand of support for a cheerful society .

Thus , it is evident that from all discussion till now that , both the arguments carry significance and neither can be refuted outright . Nonetheless , I personally subscribe to proposition that , until and unless people intervention is not harmful to others and are in bound of the rules and laws , people are most welcomed and encouraged to show their responsibility towards the betterment of society .