Posts by carmspinto

carmspinto

Nov 11, 2013

Writing Feedback / IELTS General task 1- You have a full time job and also doing a part time evening course. [3]

1.i'm writing this letter to inform u that I will not be able to continue the computer diploma course from next month.
you write "u" it should be "you", dont use slang, this is a formal letter.

2. this letter should have date and address, which are parts of a letter.

carmspinto

Nov 8, 2013

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Choosing a job is a critical decision in the life of every person. [4]

1. Many parents want their children to have similar jobs with them
with them? it should be like them

2.because children can gain useful help from their parents and they easily follow the steps of their parents in the future.
maybe if you say that children might have some advantages on studying the same career as their parents

3.First of all, the children can have advice from their parents.
children could listen to parents advicements

4.Because my father is accustomed to the career.
change this word

5.In addition, children can easily follow the steps of their parents in the future if they choose the similar jobs with them.

carmspinto

Oct 25, 2013

Writing Feedback / Love and friendship - the best things in life are free. [3]

Nowadays people think that the best things in life can be only buy with money instead of thinking that the best things can be reach by ourselves. many things are free in this life, so we have to joy our precious moments. we agree with the statement "the bst things in life are free" for example love, friendship,family, health, the love of God,etc. for many reasons.

Many people in this world have love, love is an extraordinary feeling that each people feels for another person. Also with love we can do best things in our lives for example the love that parents feel about their sons and daughters it's a free thing. People enjoy loving because they feel happy with that special person also they feel comfortable and they that, that special person will be always with her or him no matter what happens.

Other best thing in life that is free is our friendship. all people need friends to share their secrets and to have support from others. Also you have fun with them and you share moments that you will never forget. another thing is our health, in the life health is the most important thing. what is the value of money if you don't have a healthy life style.

At the same time , we have great moments in our lives, we also can go through bad experiences that might make us remember forever. When better things arrive to our life, we live them no matter what, you just live that special occasion ever happened and for free because it's our convinience.