Posts by ranin
Name: ranin abdallah
Joined: Oct 25, 2013 |
Last Post: Dec 20, 2013
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From: Palestina
School: latian school
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Undergraduate /
Hydrophobia; College of William and Mary ; optional opportunity [5]
I like your essay. However, I feel like you should organize your sentence structure in your last few concluding sentences. Maybe like this: "I can swim pretty well now and I can proudly say that I conquered my fear. Now, I am moving towards the quest of conquering the world
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BENEFITS OF READING [6]
it seems good and have many ideas but I think if you make it in more one paragraph :)
Essays /
god gives my country a fashion dress; describe a spring -Need Help [3]
that was a title that teacher give it to us in the class to write an essay , in two line , but I get a low mark and I still didn't know why !
Every year in some seasons , god gives my country a fashion dress , dropping in it many bottles of perfume that making your nostril dance . the sound of nature could mummer to your ears easly . the tress were green as they could be , and the branches were swam like in the sea , the flowers are sitting everywhere you can hear them gossiping here and thereplease wait your advice to tell me where I have wrong and comments to can improve myself and pleas if you can give me some sites or anythings could help my writing :(
Thanks !
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