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Name: Umanga Mulmi
Joined: Oct 26, 2013
Last Post: Oct 27, 2013
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From: Nepal
School: Gandaki Boarding School

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umanga   
Oct 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Watching television is bad [4]

In the short span of almost two century the world has changed from the wood age to the towards modern scientific age.In this time alot of invention took place and one of the most important one is telivison. As also debate goes pass by pass that television is good for student or not.And I strongly disagree with the above statement.

I think I would probably not be wrong If I say that Television is the major cause for making people unsociable.Watching television is just the waste of the time as instead of watching the television you could read the novels to boost your vocabulary,play games for your physical fitness or help your parents in the different household purposes or do some part time jobs so you could earn some pocket money for the expenditure.

Students are the one who always are in the lack of the time as they have to complete a lot of assignments and make their notes and watching television for them causes them the misuse of the time.Even though their are few channels like Discovery,National geographic which give proper education but their are alot of the channels which shows pronography,horror action and other drammas which causes only the reason for the unsociable and only the cause of waste and waste of time.Also in the South Asia we can get a lot of the cases that watching of television causes in the proper care of the babies also.

As in my opinion watching television is only the waste of the time
umanga   
Oct 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / [toefl task] Is the purpose of television to educate, not to entertain? [5]

Your essay body part is quiet little bit okay. But you need is the variation of the tenses and your introduction paragraph lack something.I am also a amature like you so i am not able to explain clearly to you..but you need to improve your introductory paragraphy

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Umanga mulmi
Pokhara,Nepal
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