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Oct 28, 2013
Undergraduate / Green Club; Extracurricular Essay -I turned off all the lights [6]
Go environmentalism and green comrade!
A bit too many I's in this essay (Stanford?) which makes the essay seem more like a biography.
Starting from "Also, I was able", show, don't tell.
Change "besides this" to "However, I was most pleased"
Go environmentalism and green comrade!
A bit too many I's in this essay (Stanford?) which makes the essay seem more like a biography.
Starting from "Also, I was able", show, don't tell.
Change "besides this" to "However, I was most pleased"