dabbh1997
Nov 30, 2013
Undergraduate / 'My cousin took her life' - Macaulay Honors Essay #1 - Personal Experince [7]
Thank you so much! I'll take a look at your essay as well.
Thank you so much! I'll take a look at your essay as well.
dabbh1997
Nov 26, 2013
Undergraduate / 'My cousin took her life' - Macaulay Honors Essay #1 - Personal Experince [7]
Thank you so much! Your advice meant a lot to me, and I really appreciate your comments, because this was a very hard experience to write about. It's been a long journey for me, and once again, I appreciate your advice and comments.
Thank you so much! Your advice meant a lot to me, and I really appreciate your comments, because this was a very hard experience to write about. It's been a long journey for me, and once again, I appreciate your advice and comments.
dabbh1997
Nov 26, 2013
Undergraduate / "What it Takes to be a Pioneer" -- UC Transfer Essay [3]
This is really good! However, you have alot of background information. I would suggest only about a paragraph of Bratz Dolls (background information), and you should include more about your interest in marketing. Basically just get straight to the point.
If possible, please look at my essay. Thank You :)
This is really good! However, you have alot of background information. I would suggest only about a paragraph of Bratz Dolls (background information), and you should include more about your interest in marketing. Basically just get straight to the point.
If possible, please look at my essay. Thank You :)
dabbh1997
Nov 26, 2013
Undergraduate / 'My cousin took her life' - Macaulay Honors Essay #1 - Personal Experince [7]
Please read my essay and leave any suggestions as well as grammatical errors, punctuation errors etc. Thank You! xoxo
There's a quote that we all say; "You never know what you have, until it's gone." What do you think? Well, when you think about it, you never do truly appreciate the people you have in your life. You become so used to those people being there that you start thinking that you would never lose them. However, the real truth is you do know what you have, you just never think that you would lose it.
On July 2nd 2010 at 10:34 pm, I received news that my cousin, Cari, had taken her life. Cari was one someone I looked upon as a cousin, a sister, a best friend, and a role model. She was always in my life, so I never thought I would lose her, especially that fast. After Cari's death, I fell into major depression, and it affected my life very negatively. I fell behind in school, became very moody and hateful towards things, avoided talking to my family and worst of all, I became hateful towards myself. After a few months, I began to see a therapist to talk about what had happened, and I began to realize the harm I was causing myself, as well as why Cari took her life. Cari was very independent and outspoken. She always said that no one else could ever make your choices for you, because your choices were yours alone. I understood what that meant after she was gone. That's when I realized that what she did was not only her choice, but it was always her happiness.
What Cari taught me was to cherish and appreciate the people who are in my life. The reality is that anyone can die at any moment. No one knows when, where, or even how death may occur. Therefore, every moment that I spend with my friends and family are moments that I cherish and that I will never replace. Her death changed my thoughts about life. I started to think more about the present, less about the future, and moved on from the past. Truth is every life is precious, but why hurt ourselves over a person who made a choice to be happy? The most important thing I learned from Cari was to love and appreciate myself. Even when things don't go my way, I always remind myself of what a strong, intelligent, and confident person I have become, and that feeling is what makes me capable of opening a new chapter to new day.
I have no regrets in my life. I think that what happened to me was for a reason. I will never be able to forget Cari, but I will never forget what she has taught me either. I have learned to not only love the people around me, but love the person that I am. True, the past can hurt, but there's always something to learn from it which can only make you stronger.
Please read my essay and leave any suggestions as well as grammatical errors, punctuation errors etc. Thank You! xoxo
There's a quote that we all say; "You never know what you have, until it's gone." What do you think? Well, when you think about it, you never do truly appreciate the people you have in your life. You become so used to those people being there that you start thinking that you would never lose them. However, the real truth is you do know what you have, you just never think that you would lose it.
On July 2nd 2010 at 10:34 pm, I received news that my cousin, Cari, had taken her life. Cari was one someone I looked upon as a cousin, a sister, a best friend, and a role model. She was always in my life, so I never thought I would lose her, especially that fast. After Cari's death, I fell into major depression, and it affected my life very negatively. I fell behind in school, became very moody and hateful towards things, avoided talking to my family and worst of all, I became hateful towards myself. After a few months, I began to see a therapist to talk about what had happened, and I began to realize the harm I was causing myself, as well as why Cari took her life. Cari was very independent and outspoken. She always said that no one else could ever make your choices for you, because your choices were yours alone. I understood what that meant after she was gone. That's when I realized that what she did was not only her choice, but it was always her happiness.
What Cari taught me was to cherish and appreciate the people who are in my life. The reality is that anyone can die at any moment. No one knows when, where, or even how death may occur. Therefore, every moment that I spend with my friends and family are moments that I cherish and that I will never replace. Her death changed my thoughts about life. I started to think more about the present, less about the future, and moved on from the past. Truth is every life is precious, but why hurt ourselves over a person who made a choice to be happy? The most important thing I learned from Cari was to love and appreciate myself. Even when things don't go my way, I always remind myself of what a strong, intelligent, and confident person I have become, and that feeling is what makes me capable of opening a new chapter to new day.
I have no regrets in my life. I think that what happened to me was for a reason. I will never be able to forget Cari, but I will never forget what she has taught me either. I have learned to not only love the people around me, but love the person that I am. True, the past can hurt, but there's always something to learn from it which can only make you stronger.
