candymare
Nov 28, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Stayed in Viatnem for a summer' - USC Short Answers. [2]
This is a nice essay. You provide good/specific examples. Just one part seemed it a bit awkward:
"I will be able to supplement my global awareness gained from the School of International Relations with living in a vivacious international city alongside more enrolled foreign students than any other university in the country"
maybe you could shorten this or rephrase it. i thought it seemed a little confusing or even a bit run-on.
Otherwise it's a good essay :)
This is a nice essay. You provide good/specific examples. Just one part seemed it a bit awkward:
"I will be able to supplement my global awareness gained from the School of International Relations with living in a vivacious international city alongside more enrolled foreign students than any other university in the country"
maybe you could shorten this or rephrase it. i thought it seemed a little confusing or even a bit run-on.
Otherwise it's a good essay :)