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Name: Ellen Lu
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hanlus   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / 'wide spectrum' A U of T - What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree? [4]

heh, thanks for the comments! i'll be sure to fix things up for my essay.

mmm for the spf you need to fill out extra-curriculars, academic history, a "timeline" and other things but those are really just caretaking, getting to know your background and factual stuff. the only thing you need to really need to worry about is the essay question :--)
hanlus   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / My admiration for my FATHER;University of Toronto - What inspired me to pursue Engineering [3]

ESSAY QUESTION
Please write a brief essay that answers the following questions.

What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree and why would you like to study at the University of Toronto?
What skills have you developed through your extra-curricular experiences that will support your future success as both a student and an engineer?


(so i copied a bit from my waterloo aif lol)

The most inspirational person in my life is my father. My admiration for my father the engineer has been lifelong, and it is my dream to follow in his footsteps and become as great of an engineer as he is. However, at one point in my life I abandoned my dream of engineering. After a few physics courses I realized that I simply could not create things that worked properly. However, my eleventh grade physics teacher told me one day that engineers not only made things, but fixed what was broken as well. Suddenly, I had hope again; I am fantastic at fixing things! My interests in physics naturally gravitated me towards Track One. I am passionate about the sciences and I want a clear understanding of what it means to work in the engineering field before I make my final decision as to which stream of engineering I choose. I know that entering the prestigious Track One program at the University of Toronto is a vital component in helping me sort out my future and achieve my dream. It is the perfect program for me, combining innovation, variety, and thorough education into one comprehensive program. My father's profound influence on my future will never be forgotten. I want to become an engineer for the both of us and I will never give up!

My extra-curricular activities always involve open expression of ideas and opinions. I am an executive on iSci, a science tutoring club at my school, and it is necessary for me to have the leadership and communication skills to organize the club meetings. I must also be able to apply my knowledge in the sciences to help the students having difficulty with their schoolwork. As an engineer in the work field, I know that I will be able to work cohesively with my colleagues to get the necessary work done because I have developed proficient people skills in high school. Similarly, with Math Tutor, I can communicate clearly my knowledge and help those in need. I think tutors are problem solvers, and I think engineers are problem solvers as well. I know that my strengths in problem solving and communication are promising of successful future in engineering. My academic strengths lie in maths and sciences, ensuring a future of success as both a student and an engineer. My third and last extra-curricular activity is being a member of Design Team. In this club, I give my input for new activities and facilitate them over the course of the year. I am able to balance my extra-curricular activities with my school work and my personal life fairly well. I know that being able to manage time effectively is a quality required to succeed as both a student at the University of Toronto and as a working engineer as well. I believe that my exceptional time management and interpersonal skills make me a great candidate for an engineering degree. This opportunity means the world to me and I would be honoured to have a position in the Track One program at the University of Toronto. (2940/3000 characters)
hanlus   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / I wanted to be an astronaut. Caltech's opportunities and resources, supplement essay [7]

yep, i agree with helloimyellow. it seems as though you're not really talking about the prompt. try to focus more on you and your community and your interactions rather than just reading about something in an article. maybe add in another anecdote about how a person/a specific experience has pushed you to wanting to become a researcher. hmm... i think you should try to make it more personal, maybe they would like that.

also, just remember to capitalize everything that's necessary! read it out loud and then add in/take out some commas as well. good luck :--)
hanlus   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / 'wide spectrum' A U of T - What has inspired you to pursue an engineering degree? [4]

heyo, i'm writing the same application as you! ok, so here's what i think:

your three paragraph format is fine, and i like how you talk about different aspects of your life. however, your ideas seem very scattered. you're jumping all over the place. try to focus on one idea and answer the question: "why do you want to attend UT?" is it because you think their program will help you succeed? how so? why is UT more suited for you than any of the other schools? i feel as though you talk a lot about what you did/like but not how it relates back to engineering

also, i think that the way you're speaking in this essay response is a bit too lax. try to make it slightly more formal - don't use words like cool or phrases like "laughing my head off" because it doesn't seem like you're serious about the spot you're applying for. they don't want a student that takes school as a joke, they want students that are serious about their futures.

hope i helped a bit :--)
hanlus   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / [WATERLOO AIF] Engineering interests and goals [2]

Engineering Interests and Goals (*Required)

Response:

My father is an engineer who is happy with his career. My dream is to become an engineer because I want to follow in my father's footsteps. However, at one point in my life I abandoned my dream of engineering. After a few physics courses I realized that I simply could not create things that worked properly. However, my eleventh grade physics teacher told me one day that most engineers only fixed what was broken. Suddenly, I had hope again; I am fantastic at fixing things. My interests in chemistry and physics naturally gravitated me towards a career in chemical engineering. Although I am clumsy with wires and magnets, I am extremely proficient in the lab. Working with chemicals, doing titrations, and synthesizing compounds only seems natural to me. I know that entering the chemical engineering program at Waterloo is vital in helping me achieve my dream and lifelong happiness. (12 characters remaining)

so... is it okay??? please help edit & improve :--)