Posts by SammieA

SammieA

Dec 28, 2013

Undergraduate / Stanford Supplements- The "Teacher"; "Debater"; "Collector"; and "Worker" [7]

supplement 1: it's good, if you still have room for words you should elaborate more on what motivated you to help these young students
supplement 2: you can take away details about how bills are made and passed etc, but i think you should add what you took from that experience and if it motivated you to do anything etc.

supplement 3: my favorite, it captures your life and your personality and i love it!
supplement 4: i think you should stick with this idea because it captures your love for you mom, and i can tell you're being honest and genuine about it. and after 'numerous' you should add 'strands or amounts'

would love some feedback on mine as well!

SammieA

Dec 28, 2013

Undergraduate / growing up with a sibling - stanford supplement letter to roomate [7]

Hey!
Love the message that you're trying to convey, but some parts of your essay may come off as a little harsh: 'my brother was a burden'

maybe reword these types of phrases a little, or just sum it up with a phrase like 'sibling rivalry'
you want to sound positive and welcoming, so maybe focus more on how you became independent and responsible, and how you turned a negative situation and turned it into a positive impact on your life. Focus more on YOU and the type of person you are!

Would love some feedback on mine as well!

SammieA

Dec 28, 2013

Undergraduate / Stanford Supplement/ Special Olympics/ or just Olympics [2]

Hey everyone, would appreciate some feedback, no matter how harsh! Thanks!

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. (150 word limit.)

Sports have always been a big part of my life. Once I heard about Special Olympics, an organization that helps over 13,000 athletes with disabilities, I immediately became an active volunteer throughout high school. One of my most profound experiences occurred during junior year. I remember coaching and cheering for a basketball team comprised of 10 year olds, who all had a mental disability. Like my little brother, they loved to play basketball. The only difference was that they were diagnosed with learning disabilities and struggled to do day-to-day tasks because of them. It was evident that the court was one of the places where they were able to experience the joy of being involved in a team and feel supported by the community. I will remember coaching and teaching them for the rest of my life because I felt an immense joy spreading cheer to these young kids' lives.