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Posts by raflo
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Last Post: Feb 20, 2014
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raflo   
Feb 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS - TASK1 - BAR CHART - average bed use in three typical hospitals [7]

TASK 1
The chart below shows the average bed use in three typical hospitals internationally between 1997 and 2006.

The information given presents the percentage of average bed use in hospitals of three countries over the decade period.
Throughout the graph,three trends of bed use began to rocket from 1997 with approximately Chinese hospital - 70%, Ukranian hospital - just under 60% and last one French hospital - about two fifth.However, the highest percentage among the others was owned by Chinese hospital from 1997 till 2006 with nearly three third.

The figure of Ukranian and French hospitals continued increasing till 2003 from about 40-58% to nearly 70%. After the picking to the top, the demand of bed use narrowed in both Ukranian and French hospitals.The bed usage of Ukranian hospitals experienced a gradual fall till at the end of of the period. As regarding to French, it declibed continiously til 2005. After the declines, it saw an insignificant decrease from about 60% to roughly its initial rate,which it had been in1997.

Overall, the proportion of bed usage in Chinese hospitals showed the largest increase among the others.
raflo   
Feb 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Traditional methods of cooking is likely to be extinct - IELTS writing [7]

Obviously, this significantly reduces numbers of people who eat traditional foods. I considered myself as an example of those people I stated above.

"significantly" is adverb and you should use adjective, "significant"

In another words , traditional meals are not likely to be replaced, apparently.

"words" is plural noun, you should use "other words" instead of "another words"
raflo   
Jan 27, 2014
Writing Feedback / Is it true that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions? [7]

A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material

hello!!! It's my first essay,which I write to EssayForum. Please, give me some advice to write effective essays.thank you in advance!!!

At the present time some people hold the viewpoint that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions ,not to their honour ,kindness and trust.and I have to partly disagree with this statement.There is alot of controversery about it.In this essay I am going to examine this question from my both points of view.

First of all, in the past diginty of a person is measured by their behaviour ,character and ability. Because the more they had personal features and abilities ,the more they were appreciated. For instance, kings were fair and they looked up to their honourable and trustworthy people and they collected reliable people as an employee.

However, nowadays this habit is less appreciated by modern people. Usually people are in touch with people who have social rank or wealth. This habit brings them more opportunities and utilities than the poor can give them.For example,in one office one worker looks up more to their boss than maids of this this office, inspite of maids' honour, kindness.Since people can obtain more benefits from their boss than maids.

Moreover, there are also people who appreciate personal features in the world. Because financial benefit is not enough to live happily. A good example of this is that, one ill person need whoever's kindness not social status or valuable possessions.

Overall, i think the most important thing in dignity of person is personal features such as kindness and trust, not people's social title or wealth.
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