Undergraduate / Career and Goals essay paragraph needs to be reviewed AND YOU KINDLY ! [8]

Briefly describe your career development to date. This is an opportunity to tell your workstory. For example, you might discuss what you wanted to do as a child, discuss people that were influential in shaping your career path (for better or worse) as you grew up, and outline the role of your education or early jobs in your career development. Discuss the work you are doing now, and share your career goals and dreams. This narrative should be no longer than two pages, typed and double-spaced.

this is one of the questions being asked for my essay below is what i have written so far somone please tell me if i have covered everything they have asked in the question PLEASE AND THANK YOU KINDLY !!

Career development is an important step in life because it allows you to assess what careers you wish to achieve and how you will become successful in achieving them. As a child I always wanted to be a teacher the kindness and helpfulness of a lot of my teachers over the years really made me appreciate the profession the fact that whenever I needed help or support with something it was always there. It shaped my personal values as it made me love helping others and supporting them with anything they needed, It satisfied me to the fullest. In my work today I am employed as Mobile Advisor(Sales Associate) I help people with all sorts of mobile phone related things such as selecting a new phone and/or new cell phone plan or all troubleshooting with the mobile devices my past education experience has influenced me greatly with my job as I always go above and beyond to help my customers get exactly what they need.