Undergraduate / Fascinated by the business world (Ryerson essay) [5]

Hello everyone

I'm going to apply for Business Management program in Ryerson uni. So I have to submit an essay. Below is the essay that I have written. Please check this essay for grammatical errors and give me suggestions to improve it.

I was greatly fascinated by the business world since my childhood. It was because I grew up in a business-minded family; they were role models to me. I learned valuable lessons from them, especially from my father, who explained to me how the business ran such as merchandising, interpersonal relationship and business ethics. Moreover, he told me that businessmen play a significant role in the development of our society by providing employment to thousands of people in their huge organizations. Our society would have been an undeveloped one without their massive contribution. Hearing all these, I was greatly motivated to become a businessman in future so that I can earn profit for myself as well as take part in the development of our society.

I knew this was not so easy to achieve without good understanding of the business concepts. So, I decided to indulge myself in all the activities that would help me gain business knowledge. From then onwards, I was interested in watching business news channels and reading business columns in the newspapers and magazines. Moreover, I took courses related to business in my O and A-level exams including Commerce and Accounting. Eventually, I was able to pass my exams with satisfying grades which directed me to learn more about the business in real life; in real situation.

In addition to studies, I have been working part-time in a travel agency to enhance my knowledge about the real business world. The important things that I learned there are interpersonal relationship skills and public relations in detail. Almost everyone there is satisfied with my working condition. Also, sometimes I help my father in his retail shop by performing fairly significant tasks like bookkeeping and collecting data. All these experiences have well prepared me to learn in a good university like Ryerson.

I have chosen Ryerson University to study "Business Management" program for a number of reasons. Firstly, Ryerson has distinctive undergraduate program that combines theory with real-world experience, and in such a program I will be able to transform myself into a business marvel. Moreover, I will be able to get a job very quickly and easily after I graduate, because, statistically speaking, more than 94% of Ryerson's students are employed within six months after graduation. Also, this program, taught by highly qualified faculty members boasting years of experience in teaching 'Business Management', will surely provide me with the highest quality education. Therefore, I can say that I have chosen the best university to pursue my undergraduate program and I am sure I will have a bright future after graduating from this university.

Undergraduate / "Son,I want you to be an owner of a big department store";Ryerson - Retail Management [4]

Hi everyone, I am applying in 'Retail Management' in Ryerson uni. Please check this essay and give me some useful tips to improve.

"Son, I want you to be an owner of a big department store one day when you grow up," my father used to say these words to me all the time when I was in school. At that time, I didn't know the reason behind it. But as I grew up I watched my father working hard in his retail shop just to attract as many customers as possible. He used to use various strategies to sell the products and maximize his profits. Every single day was new and challenging. He had to instantly find out the loss making projects and replace it with profitable dealings. He could do these things very quickly and effectively as he had mastered the technique. These things made me a bit curious to learn more about business. I wanted to achieve the same skills as my father had achieved from his years of experience. So, I decided to pursue my career in business. In fact, I decided to start my own retailing business in future. My dream seemed to come into reality when I achieved good results in my O and A level exams, especially in Accounting and Commerce. But now I must get an admission in a good university to fulfill my dream. So, with a strong interest in retail industry I started to search out for the universities in Toronto that offer courses in retailing. Then, I found the program named 'Retail Management' at Ryerson University- a perfect program to build my career in retail industry.

This program will teach me all the necessary skills that are required to succeed in retail industry, for example, leadership and communication skills. In addition, this program is designed perfectly to match the continuous changing business world. We will learn business theories as well as practical experience to overcome any obstacles in the real business world. Another reason is that the facilities are great in the 'Ted Rogers School of Business Management' which is located in downtown Toronto-the main business center of the city. So, I can also experience real-world learning. Also, this program is taught by highly qualified faculty members who have years of experience in teaching 'Retail Management'. So, I am absolutely sure about good quality education.

Apart from studying, I usually work in our retail shop with my father to broaden my knowledge about retail industry. I learned valuable things from my father, such as, communicating with customers and solving there problems. In addition, I started learning French because it will help me to target more customers as my own retailing business expands.

Finally, I can say that I have chosen the best university to pursue my undergraduate program and I am sure I will have a bright future after graduating from this university.