Writing Feedback / Test essay: Should children obey authority? [7]

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Some people think children should obey rules and do what the teachers want them to do.
Others think controlled children are not well-prepared for children's adult life in future.
Whenever and wherever, the topic, how to educate the next generation, keeps heated to be discussed. Some people say that children should do what they are asked by teachers, while I insist that controlling children has no advantages of their lives.

Granted, it is commonly accepted that the rules made by teachers can, to some extent, avoid students driving a' stray. As we all know, that young students lack of the ability to distinguish right from wrong. If there is no restriction from teachers, a sea of the students may fight with classmates, even become thieves or robbers. In fact, a few of students are aggressive and interested in illegal deeds. Thus, it is necessary for the teachers to give students some rules to obey.

Nevertheless, these restrictions do harm for the development of students' mind. It is indisputable that if one wishes to be a successful person, she or he must have unique character. What is more, a person - who is outstanding of his or her area - is usually independent. In order to cultivate children to have these significant characters, they should allow doing what they want to do, no matter how old they are. Yet, teachers are supposed to give them useful advices to let them know whether their activities are justified or inaccurate.

To sum up, I reaffirm that though controlling children is helpful for children to become the excellent students, it is no merit for their adult lives. As a result, what the teachers should do is to give their students some rules to avoid them doing illegal behavior, instead of restricting them.

Writing Feedback / ielts essay - Useing animals for the benefit of the human beings [4]

Some people think it is acceptable to use animals for the benefit of the human beings. Some people think it is wrong to exploit animals for the human purposes. What is your opinion?

With the rapid development of the standard of people's life, increasing numbers of animal experiments are done, new medicines and foods, for instance. Some opponents says that it is cruel to animals and nature, however, I believe that no sensible person will deny that it is a dramatically cruel activity to humanity if the latest foods or medicines are allowed to sold without testing on animals. In my essay, I will discuss this issue from twofold aspects.

First of all, as we all know, animals are friendly and vital for people, because if there are no animals in the world, the balance of nature will broke down, and we, human, will die out as well. The animal experiments accelerate the vanishing of some categories of animals. In other words, doing this various testing is a hazard of human's future and next generation.

Though animal experiments have negative impact on the natural balance, it is necessary to make sure that people can live a long life. To begin with, it is indisputable that every new kind food or pill may be noxious, and scientists must do something to insure that the new invention benefits people instead of making people ill or even dying. The new foods or medicines are invented to promote the quantity of human's life. Thus even if they are volunteers; they cannot take the place of animals to test the new foods or medicines. Furthermore, it also have potentially harm for human's health without any testing.

To sum up, I reaffirm that although there is some disadvantages of animals' profits, the merits of animal experiments still outweigh the demerits.

Writing Feedback / ielts essay: should governments pay university course fees? [3]

Some people think that governments should pay the course fees for those who want to go to university. Do you agree or disagree?
With the extremely rapid development of the society, increasing young people choose to accept the higher education, in order to enhance their competitiveness. Yet, it is indisputable that the tuition is really high, and some family cannot afford it, because of which, personally, I insist that it should be a duty of the government to pay the course fees. In my essay, I will talk about this topic on twofold.

First of all, it benefits individuals a lot to pay the tuition by the governments. We all know, studying is not an easy job to every person, and the one who want to have some achievements in the academic areas must pay a great of efforts. There is no reason to require the students, who are trying their best to get a good result in their study, to earn the large sum of money for their further education. In order to encourage this kind of students to continue to work hard to gain more professional skills to make sure they can lead high quantity lives after their graduated, it is a vital and effective option for the governments to pay for their tuition.

More importantly, it is not only for personal benefit, but also for governments. Owning to the ever-accelerated updating of science and technology, modern societies need much more high-tech talents. That is a quite useful method to drive more young person to pursuit the higher education, and the same time to give them the belief that they should put their shoulder to the wheel to return the society.

To sum up, paying the cursers is a symbol of society progress. It gives people dwelling in the society a kind of belonging, and makes individuals become more unity. Therefore, I reaffirm that the tuition should be paid by governments.

Writing Feedback / itels essay: should children learn foreign language from elementary school? [7]

Some people think that children should learn foreign language from elementary school but nor secondary school. What's your opinion? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

With the increasingly rapid economic globalization, learning foreign language becomes hotter than ever before. Meanwhile, the thorny issue, whether should children begin the foreign language study in primary school, is heated argued by public. From my own perspective, no matter whether children begin to learn foreign language from elementary school has both merits and demerits.

Granted, there could be some benefits to introduce multi-culture into the next generation. For one thing, young children are interested in everything surrounding them. Whenever they saw an unfamiliar subject, they always ask their parents or teachers what and why. Because of that, primary school time is the right ages for humanity to learn a kind of foreign language, as well as the oversea culture. For another, primary school students have more time to learn a foreign language. They have extremely little homework, and they are really energetic; thus, it is not a hard work for them to master a language.

Nevertheless, asking children to learn the foreign language is, to some extent, hazard to the diversity of the languages and culture. As we all known, children know a little mount of their own history and policy, so it is easy to misunderstand for what they need to learn a foreign language. Furthermore, young children are lack of the ability to distinguish the right from wrong. Some pupils from developing countries will wish they were born at the wealthy countries, after they access the foreign language and the culture, thus, they give the local language study up.

To sum up, though teaching the elementary school students foreign languages has risk for the local culture, can let people to master a foreign language like they were the native speaker, and know better the outside world.