Posts by tinubalde

tinubalde

Jun 10, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Steps in the hiring process [5]

Sorry it's biased not unbiased. I'll try to research regarding the use of personal pronouns in IELTS but I think that comes from one of our retired IELTS examiner.

tinubalde

Jun 9, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Steps in the hiring process [5]

They said, using personal pronouns are quite unbiased. You may substitute it with an individual , a person or an applicant instead. :-)

tinubalde

Jun 9, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Steps in the hiring process [5]

When writing introduction, it should be two or more sentences to call it a paragraph.

For instance,

The diagram illustrates the process on how a large company hires an employee. On the whole, it can be observed that a step-by-step process must be followed before an employee can be permanently hired in a big company.

tinubalde

Jun 8, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis [6]

Hi Ahmad!

I think my writing is still not enough, I need a 7 for me to pass. Anyway, your tips are very helpful.

Thank you so much

Tina :-)

tinubalde

Jun 8, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1: Share expenditure for selected categories in four countries [9]

The bar chart ~~shows~~ how people ~~in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan~~ allocate different shares of amount spending to five basic need ~~categories;~~ food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing in 2009.

Write 2 sentences to call it a paragraph in Introduction.

E.g.
The bar chart presents how people allocate different shares of amount spending to five basic needs such as food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing. This study was done in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan in 2009.

Note: Make use of word play shows = presents, illustrates, depicts, represents, etc.

tinubalde

Jun 6, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis [6]

Sorry I forgot to attach. Here's the image...

ielts_writing_task_1.jpg

tinubalde

Jun 5, 2014

Writing Feedback / [IELTS TASK 2] Children's engagement in paid work. Right or wrong? [11]

Paragraph structure should be even but overall idioms are plus points as well as examples and experiences. :-)

tinubalde

Jun 5, 2014

Writing Feedback / IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis [6]

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Answer: 178 words
The given pie chart presents the different reason for land degradation globally. On the other hand, the table illustrates the percentage of soil degradation and its causes on three regions in the year 1990.

It is clear that over-grazing contributed as the highest percentage of land degradation all over the world accounting to more than a third. However, deforestation and over-cultivation were the second major reasons which added to almost 60% while other factors that lead to land degradation comprise less than 10% of the total percentage.

As per region, Europe leads by almost a quarter in total land degradation wherein 9.8% accounted from deforestation and the rest were from over-cultivation and over-grazing. On the other hand, Oceania was the second highest in percentage and its only causes were from deforestation and over-grazing which contributes to less than 15% of the total land degradation. North America which was the lowest percentage from the rest only got 5% on total land degradation.

Overall, the region affected by majority of land degradation during 1990 was Europe. Whereas, the main reason of land degradation all over the world was over-grazing.