Writing Feedback / TOEFL: High stress job paid a lot of money or low stress job with just enough to live on? [3]

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Question : Would you rather have a high stress job that paid a lot of money or a low stress job that provide you with just enough to live on. Please give specific reasons, details , and examples to support your response.

Money is everything. It is hard to leave without money that we value it as an indispensable factor satisfying our needs. People question whether the approaching of a lot of money should be received from hard working. If I have to deal with some stress tasks in order to gain high salary, I personally would be happy rather than suffering from having just enough money to survive from day-to-day.

To begin with, jobs paying huge salary generally come not only with stress but also challenges and fun. I believe that taking advantages of the opportunities of managing painstaking tasks is the effective methods of successful person. For example, Steve Jobs, Apple's CEO, is the one that have a strong-minded effort through difficulties in his work. Moreover, handling all complex situation is what he thought as the most fun. With this motivation, he kept busy, pursued new knowledge and tried to complete unsolvable tasks and challenges.

Furthermore, jobs with much salary are more likely to increase chances for prosperous wealthy. With just small money for day-to-day living seems to be impossible for a person who would like to have a stable financial security. I think that being affluence is resulted from money saving and investing in stocks. When people confront insufficient salary for saving, it would damage their financial security and give a sound of financial status failure. Additionally, negative impact in the long run for persons who have family would be very struggling as they need huge money to afford their children's education, pay for taxes, utilities and more. Thus, their future may be filled with agony.

To conclude, I am convinced that high stress work with a great number of money is overweight low stress work with small money because of more challenges, amusement and sound of financial success in the long term. Thus, I would better select high stress work which enriches my financial statement.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Would you choose your own roommate? [2]

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You have been told that dormitory rooms at your university must be shared by two students.
Would you rather have the university assign a student to share a room with you, or would you rather choose your own roommate?
Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. 

Living with someone for a period of life is a huge commitment because it inevitably comes with responsibility as well as staying at home with family.

There is a question whether I select my roommate if I must share the room with others. Personally, I believe that unless I can choose my roommate,

it will be suffering rather than happiness for the following reasons.

To begin with, roommates who have mutual characteristics basically show compatibility in needs, cultures, religious and interests.
Without compatibility in common basic requirements, persons would be uneasy to live together. For example,
one of my friends who has lived with her dissimilar roommate, they often enter into conflict because of a few normal problems.
Especially, feuding with her roommate over different time taken for individual activities like reading books.
While one is reading book, another is watching television.

Not only does choosing own roommate result in compatibility but also it leads to maintain long relationships.
Comparatively, life in university takes at least two years so staying with a person feels longer than that.
Staying with roommate is to treat he/she as a member of family because roommate will participates in a person's daily lives
including having meals, playing games, doing housework , or even making crucial decision in some situations.
As a result, this increases reliability in each other. Friends of mine who have own-chosen roommates are examples.
They continue to stay with their roommates in apartments after graduating from university because positive impression
and used-to-be environment cause them to keep roommate closely as same as previous moment.

To conclude, I am of opinion that selecting my roommate is what suits me the most because it provides roommate who shares compatibility.
Also, this benefits in long-run keeping companions.