Writing Feedback / Manufacturing sector contributed most in the UK economy throughout the century. [2]

The graph demonstrate the contribution of agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial sectors in the economy of UK during the 20th century.

Overall, the contribution of Agriculture and Manufacturing decreased whereas Business and Financial sector's role increased over the period.
In 1900, almost 50% of the UK economy came from Agriculture which increased slightly in the next 50 years. Manufacturing played an important role as well. In 1900 Manufacturing contributed 45% in the UK economy which dropped by 5% in 1950. O the contrary, Business and Financial sector only filled 10% of the economy in 1950 which was almost 0% in 1900.However, In 2000 the contribution of Agriculture dramatically fall to almost 0%, while Business and Financial sector is the leading sector by contributing 35% of the economy.

In the conclusion, we can say that Manufacturing sector contributed most in the UK economy throughout the century.

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Writing Feedback / Use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000 [NEW]

*The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.*

The graph shows the worldwide usage of water in three different sections, Agriculture, industrial and domestic during the 100 years between 1900 and 2000.

In general, the use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000 with a noticeable fluctuation between 1965 and 1975.
On contrary, there was almost no use of water in industrial and domestic sector till 1950. However, the use of water had rose steadily to 1200km3 in industries and it had also increased to around 500km3 in domestic since 1950 but rather slowly.

The table provides the information about the usage of water in two countries, Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo during the year 2000.

According to the information,359m3 water had used by average person in Brazil which is a country of 176 million people and 26,500km2 irrigated land.
On the other hand, Democratic Republic of Congo, a rather small populated country with 100km2 irrigated land had consumed averagely 8m3.

In spite of large population, Brazil had used great quantity of water.

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Writing Feedback / Some Certain jobs are suitable for men/women because of their capabilities [4]

Men and women are contributing in today's world quite equally. But, They are not built alike. Although,intellectually they might not be compared,physically and emotionally they are different. Which might explain why men and women can't be equally efficient for particular jobs.

In early days, women used to be neglected in Science and logical study departments. People used to believe women aren't capable of intellectual works. But such belief doesn't exist anymore. Women hasn't only proven that they're capable of it but also outperformed men in many sectors.

However, there's some work sectors that woman can't be replaced for man. For instance,mechanical factories where employees are required to move heavy tools which requires them muscles power . Therefore, Women can't be an alternative for these sort of works because the lacks of their physical strength.

Furthermore, several jobs like Nursing and Teaching would nominate women instead of men. Because women are consider to be more caring and patient compare to men which makes them more acceptable for these jobs.

In addition, women aren't backward in different sectors of work. Women has won novel prize along with men. Women astronauts are working in NASA. Despite of their physical limitation they have conquer highest pick of the world.They're playing sports as men.

In conclusion, Although, men and women are equally important , some certain jobs are more suitable for them because of their capabilities and other different features.

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