Writing Feedback / Parents should have much time for their children which are lonely sometimes [5]

Your essay looks quite short.
You should innovate your essay more to grab the reader's attention
You should skip a line while moving to a next paragraph.
But still the essay was good! Keep it Up!

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Music makes our lifes magical and meaningful [7]

Your essay contains good Vocabulary but it looks quite short.Innovate your essay and make it soothing for the person who is reading.As an example,you should skip a line when you're starting a paragraph because it looks like you have written everything in one para and it looks all messed up!

But still the essay was excellent. Keep It Up!