Posts by ngoctrang123

ngoctrang123

Aug 14, 2014

Writing Feedback / In undermentioned countries foot/drinks/tobacco has recorded the highest percentage of expenditures [4]

For IELTS task 1, your reported is quite good. You have a pretty structure with a clear overview. :) . I think when your table including many countries, you should repeat some of them in order to avoid misunderstanding for examiner, it not a big problem :). Moreover is about your cohesion. If yu said 'first of all' you should say 'secondly is' and finally is ' lastly'. OR if you dont want use first of all, you could say '' Overall' for overview paragraph or ' The most noticable feature''.

Italy was the country that people was considered their appearance more importantly than other countries, spending 9% of their total expenditure on clothing/footwear. The percentages of other four countries had little differences as the numbers stayed between 5-7%.

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ngoctrang123

Aug 13, 2014

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essay :: Travel within group is always safe and brings more recreations to everyone [5]

Yur essay is very clear and it easy to understand. Yu give many ideas to support for a topic. But try to use more pharses to make it look like accademic essay.

ngoctrang123

Aug 13, 2014

Writing Feedback / ielts - The transformation from childhood into adulthood are every important in each person's life [2]

[i]As children become adults, their social behavior change in some ways. What are the main different between young children's social behavior and that of adults? To what extent are the change that take place good?

By the time when children become real mature, they have to go though a long period of time there are many things change in their psychology and behavior. There are a number of differences between young children's social behavior and adults.

First of all, children exhibit a high level of honesty that mean they never tell lie, they could show their real feeling. For instance, if children feel happy, they could burst out of laughing even do not care what is happened next to them. Therefore, they could be easy to make many new friends. Secondly, children obviously a naive innocent, they do not have any responsibility for their action. If they do wrong, they only have to be treatment by their parents. Moreover, without any stressful , children do not live under a lot of pressure about social life, economy, or family, they could carry out anything ambitions that they want.

By contrast, as a children growing up into a mature when standing in active role in family or in social position. It is undoubtedly true that they will to be more mentally and social mature holding many responsibility about life. That is probably one of a main reason when the mature could not show their real feeling in some situation.People have to tell white lies for good purpose. To make my point crystal clear, let take a following scenario as an example. When your wife or husband try her or his best to cook a special dish for you even you feel it is terrible, but you do not want to make your love being emotion impairment. You do not have any choices to have to hide your true feeling. When people are in mature, they have already got weigh in consciousness, they could master sophisticated social and protect yourself.

In conclusion, the transformation from childhood into adulthood are every important in each person's life. The most importance is people have to control it into positive way to be a good civil in our society.