JuniorR
Nov 17, 2014
Writing Feedback / Do you support or oppose with the plan of the a new restaurant? TOEFL independent task [4]
Hi Vangiespen,
Thank you!
I have a lot of problems to put in practice, in the first time, the rules that I know about modifiers, comparison, verbs tense etc ( It is a problem that I have with the speaking tasks, because I said something wrong and after some seconds I realized that I spoke in the wrong way :-( ). Also, I have problems with vocabulary... I spend much time searching words to express my opinion. Besides, I know that the conclusion is weak, but I yet am not able to write a full essay on time. Now, I follow this way: 1) I write my point; 2) I write second and third paragraphs; 3) I write the introduction and the conclusion; and 4) I write what is possible in the fourth paragraph. Normally, I have four minutes to write the last paragraph and need around thirty or forty words to achieve the 300 words.
I would like to know how I can write my essay in a more polished way!
Thank you so much by the help!
. Do you want me to show you how you can further improve this essay as an example of how you can better use English grammar to present your arguments? One other thing, the conclusion became weak because you were not able to properly restate the prompt, summarize the facts, and present your opinion at the end. That is negligible though since the overall content of the essay adhered to the prompt :-)
Hi Vangiespen,
Thank you!
I have a lot of problems to put in practice, in the first time, the rules that I know about modifiers, comparison, verbs tense etc ( It is a problem that I have with the speaking tasks, because I said something wrong and after some seconds I realized that I spoke in the wrong way :-( ). Also, I have problems with vocabulary... I spend much time searching words to express my opinion. Besides, I know that the conclusion is weak, but I yet am not able to write a full essay on time. Now, I follow this way: 1) I write my point; 2) I write second and third paragraphs; 3) I write the introduction and the conclusion; and 4) I write what is possible in the fourth paragraph. Normally, I have four minutes to write the last paragraph and need around thirty or forty words to achieve the 300 words.
I would like to know how I can write my essay in a more polished way!
Thank you so much by the help!