Writing Feedback / "The biggest risk is not taking any risk." - TOEFL [3]

Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

"The biggest risk is not taking any risk." The ones who have a big dream, they need to be brave and dare to live new situations. It is not guaranteed that you are going to achieve your dream if you had planned carefully as the same way when you take risks, but it is more frustrating if you had made plans and then it went wrong. Therefore, it is essential to take chances and believe this is going to work out.

Assuming new opportunities is indispensable to have diverse experiences. In fact, life may not be easy; it will have various challenges especially when you take risks, but in the end, it can be surprisingly wonderful. For instance, some people abandon their job, family and friends and go to other country without knowing what the future holds for them. In the beginning, it can be tough to fit in this new place and find any opportunity, but after fighting against the obstacles blocking the way to get what is desired; it is possible to conquer what they are craving as well as start to build a new life in this other country.

In fact, many people are afraid to take risks and fail. It is possible to get frustrate along the way, but it is vital to never give up on your dream. To illustrate, Walt Disney, whose career is famous, had a challenging life. One of the difficulties was some of his histories, such as Mickey Mouse and Three Little Pigs, were turned down. He heard lots of "no", furthermore one editor fired him alleging that he had no imagination, after all what he had gone through, he never stop chasing his dreams.

To conclude, in this competitive world you have to be fearless and face all new situations. Even though sometimes you consider backing down and stay in the same routine that you are used to, it is necessary to have courage to take risks, be different and pursue your dream to have a successful life.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL: It is essential to control how much time you spent watching TV or movies [3]

Toefl essay - How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

How far can television and movies influence the human behavior? It is know that the number of TV viewers is increasing as the same way as the amount of hours spent watching it. Children and adults believe that it is a wonderful entertainment, but they must have in mind this is a powerful mean of communication, which can affect their way of thinking and acting.

Ideal bodies are exposed every day on TV shows and movies; perfect bodies that many people dream about having the same. How much money people are expending to have lips like Angelina Jolie? Nowadays, it is common having people going to a surgeon and asking to have the same characteristics of their favorite actor or actress.

Not only this is a problem, but also people who spent too much time in front of the TV, known as a "couch-potato". Consequently, they do not have a healthy life, for instance, they would prefer to watch their favorite show instead of going to the gym or walking on the park. Moreover, they would rather order fast food than spend time cooking, because this way they can see a movie.

Another manner it affects people is many creative and appealing advertisements can grab viewers' attention and incite them to buy products, even though they do not need it. For example, woman who are crazy about makeup, if they see one pretty actress using a new lipstick, they will buy although they already have diverse colors of lipstick.

In conclusion, so many ways television can badly influence people, for that reason it is essential to control how much time you spent watching TV or movies, also know how it can affect your mind.