Undergraduate / 'inspiring chat with a Syracuse Admissions Officer' - What influenced you to apply? [4]

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Prompt: Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?

I became interested in Syracuse University after an inspiring chat with a Syracuse Admissions Officer. Her passion for SU was infectious and as I took a closer look at the school, it became more apparent that SU is a great fit for what I am looking to major in. Located in the heart of beautiful New York, Syracuse would be a great change of pace from busy Los Angeles.

I know I can offer Syracuse passion, leadership, and amazing homemade brownies. I am looking to enhance not only my college experience, but the experience of students around me, and I know the community at Syracuse can allow me to do that.

As the Editor-in-Chief of my high school paper, I learned at length about writing a newspaper and I am certain that SU can foster my desire to take those skills to the television. The S.I. Newhouse School of Public Communications is of the nation's paramount schools of mass communication and has an especially remarkable journalism department. After learning that SU professors have reported and anchored the news and have corresponded from around the world, I know the possibilities of success are infinite at Syracuse. Broadcast journalism is a medium that I am thrilled to explore and I am eager to be involved with a cutting-edge program like that offered at Syracuse University.