gautam007
Dec 24, 2014
Graduate / Mahatma Gandhi - favourite statue of the person you wanted to make [4]
out of 5 how much i can expect
out of 5 how much i can expect
gautam007
Dec 20, 2014
Graduate / Mahatma Gandhi - favourite statue of the person you wanted to make [4]
If you are asked to make statue or monument. Then which famous personality you wanted to present in the form of of statue. please rate this essay out of as according to toefl test. And give necessary correction needed in the essay.
When someone is portrayed in statue. His/her silent piece of metallic body should have the capability to urge people, whenever they pass by. The person could be remebered for his works. But for selection of the person as a statue or monuments require much more than that. Rather than just being a art work it should demeand for special attention from general public and something in return. Many people have displayed their excellence and expertise in their own fields. As there is wide variety options and all are excellent in their own fields. If you see a film actor, he would be phenomenal in field of acting. Maybe he would have too much fan following. Does that can do relevance in present situation? Maybe he has all the charismatic personality which can mesmerize many of us. Does that personality makes difference on the present situation? Maybe it can captivate the cinema world but not the general society where there are so many people dying of poverty. The land where many people are not able to gather one time meal. The more effective choice would be the statue of some great leader who has greater reach to common public.
If I get an opprtunity I would be interested to have a statue of a person who has a positive impact on our society. The person whose presence inspires all of us every day. A person who has much more inspirational imapact on the general public than his/ her excellency . If I get the opportunity to built the staue then I will certainly go for Mahatma Gandhi, one of the greatest leader ever lived in twentieth century. The relevance of selecting Gandhi is not just because of his excellency in his works. But the utility in today part of life. As he is widely known by his philosophy of Non Violence. In this he defined that, any battle no matter how big it is? it could be won by peaceful demonstration. He single handedly lead the way for independence of our country. He help our nation to fight independence . But the question arises that what is so important in today part of life ? Our country is free. Then why need to have this statue? The simple reason is the simplicity , the leadership quality which he demonstrated was phenomenol. Gandhi have a piece of cloth to cover his body. He once told that unless he will not be able to remove poverty and poor from India. He would remain like this. So his statue signify that situation presently also. Today also there are large number of poor people who are not able to have single meal a day. That statue will compel the general population that we need to do something for our country. We need to eradicate poverty from our society. His half naked body will urge for some unexpected change in our country. The change which is most awaited.
Although, there would be many argument that why it can't be a pop star or film actor or some big celebrity related to entertainment industry. The exigency of situation depends on the present scenario. And presently in India, where so many people are suffering from poverty, the best solution would be the statue of Mahatma Gandhi.
If you are asked to make statue or monument. Then which famous personality you wanted to present in the form of of statue. please rate this essay out of as according to toefl test. And give necessary correction needed in the essay.
When someone is portrayed in statue. His/her silent piece of metallic body should have the capability to urge people, whenever they pass by. The person could be remebered for his works. But for selection of the person as a statue or monuments require much more than that. Rather than just being a art work it should demeand for special attention from general public and something in return. Many people have displayed their excellence and expertise in their own fields. As there is wide variety options and all are excellent in their own fields. If you see a film actor, he would be phenomenal in field of acting. Maybe he would have too much fan following. Does that can do relevance in present situation? Maybe he has all the charismatic personality which can mesmerize many of us. Does that personality makes difference on the present situation? Maybe it can captivate the cinema world but not the general society where there are so many people dying of poverty. The land where many people are not able to gather one time meal. The more effective choice would be the statue of some great leader who has greater reach to common public.
If I get an opprtunity I would be interested to have a statue of a person who has a positive impact on our society. The person whose presence inspires all of us every day. A person who has much more inspirational imapact on the general public than his/ her excellency . If I get the opportunity to built the staue then I will certainly go for Mahatma Gandhi, one of the greatest leader ever lived in twentieth century. The relevance of selecting Gandhi is not just because of his excellency in his works. But the utility in today part of life. As he is widely known by his philosophy of Non Violence. In this he defined that, any battle no matter how big it is? it could be won by peaceful demonstration. He single handedly lead the way for independence of our country. He help our nation to fight independence . But the question arises that what is so important in today part of life ? Our country is free. Then why need to have this statue? The simple reason is the simplicity , the leadership quality which he demonstrated was phenomenol. Gandhi have a piece of cloth to cover his body. He once told that unless he will not be able to remove poverty and poor from India. He would remain like this. So his statue signify that situation presently also. Today also there are large number of poor people who are not able to have single meal a day. That statue will compel the general population that we need to do something for our country. We need to eradicate poverty from our society. His half naked body will urge for some unexpected change in our country. The change which is most awaited.
Although, there would be many argument that why it can't be a pop star or film actor or some big celebrity related to entertainment industry. The exigency of situation depends on the present scenario. And presently in India, where so many people are suffering from poverty, the best solution would be the statue of Mahatma Gandhi.
gautam007
Dec 20, 2014
Graduate / I want to excel my skills by studying Master's in Thermal & Fluid Sciences from your institution [3]
Your second last para is that important . You don't need to be so much specific in defining your area. You need to be go to the thermal engineering but why you need to tell specified area. Instead of that you should be much more presentable about your interest About why it inspires you? why you are are so inspired to do masters. Give some very beautiful example so that they can't deny you.
Your second last para is that important . You don't need to be so much specific in defining your area. You need to be go to the thermal engineering but why you need to tell specified area. Instead of that you should be much more presentable about your interest About why it inspires you? why you are are so inspired to do masters. Give some very beautiful example so that they can't deny you.
gautam007
Dec 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Transporting food by air now provides market opportunities both exporting and importing countries. [3]
Your second point is not relevent. As demerit you are linking it with global warming but there should be some other aspects of it also. May be you should have discussed more advantages. The conclusion pretty much satisfactory but it can be much effective if you have put your point much effective manner. The length of the essay is also a matter of concern.
Your second point is not relevent. As demerit you are linking it with global warming but there should be some other aspects of it also. May be you should have discussed more advantages. The conclusion pretty much satisfactory but it can be much effective if you have put your point much effective manner. The length of the essay is also a matter of concern.
gautam007
Dec 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Business Vs House - what to buy? Give necessary reason and example [3]
thanks for valuable comment
thanks for valuable comment
gautam007
Dec 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / Business Vs House - what to buy? Give necessary reason and example [3]
You have enough money to buy a house or business .Which would you prefer to buy and why ? Give necessary reason and example to support your answer?
If house can give you satisfaction. Then buisiness gives you a pride. If house can fullfill your needs then buisiness can fullfills needs of many. I personally feel that to own a buisiness is a better option than owing a house.
Firstly, to own a buisiness means to manage multiple peoples at a time i.e if you have a shop or store, you have many peoples working under you.You managing all of them. You are giving employment to all of them. Because of one buisiness, you are giving better prospects of life to many people. It's because of one buisiness many people are earning, they able to earn better half of their life, then waht is wrong with that ? As country like India where so many people are below poverty line, where so many people are not getting bread for one time in a day. For them buisiness is the best option
Secondly, to have a buisiness can give you authority .To do what you want.To be a game changer. To apply your creative ideas as perfectly you want. Their cant be any deterioration in your work, as you are the creator . Owning a buisiness can help you attain your desire. All the people who are leading today, had been the starter one time. Like the owner of Infosys, One of the leading IT industry was started by Narayan Murthy. He started this organization in one single room. He had lots of problems in the starting. But eventually he became one of the leading industrialist of all time. And today his company is employing millions of people. This is a very significant example because it shows that how one different step by an individual have changed the life of many. This example gives the inspiration to many, that we should be job creators than job seekers. And by owning a buisiness we are taking a small steps towards this complex process.
Therefore, it can be concluded that owning a buisiness is one of the better option than owning a house because of simple but strong reason of benvolence and kindness.
You have enough money to buy a house or business .Which would you prefer to buy and why ? Give necessary reason and example to support your answer?
If house can give you satisfaction. Then buisiness gives you a pride. If house can fullfill your needs then buisiness can fullfills needs of many. I personally feel that to own a buisiness is a better option than owing a house.
Firstly, to own a buisiness means to manage multiple peoples at a time i.e if you have a shop or store, you have many peoples working under you.You managing all of them. You are giving employment to all of them. Because of one buisiness, you are giving better prospects of life to many people. It's because of one buisiness many people are earning, they able to earn better half of their life, then waht is wrong with that ? As country like India where so many people are below poverty line, where so many people are not getting bread for one time in a day. For them buisiness is the best option
Secondly, to have a buisiness can give you authority .To do what you want.To be a game changer. To apply your creative ideas as perfectly you want. Their cant be any deterioration in your work, as you are the creator . Owning a buisiness can help you attain your desire. All the people who are leading today, had been the starter one time. Like the owner of Infosys, One of the leading IT industry was started by Narayan Murthy. He started this organization in one single room. He had lots of problems in the starting. But eventually he became one of the leading industrialist of all time. And today his company is employing millions of people. This is a very significant example because it shows that how one different step by an individual have changed the life of many. This example gives the inspiration to many, that we should be job creators than job seekers. And by owning a buisiness we are taking a small steps towards this complex process.
Therefore, it can be concluded that owning a buisiness is one of the better option than owning a house because of simple but strong reason of benvolence and kindness.
gautam007
Dec 12, 2014
Grammar, Usage / Rephrase text about research paper (sentences) [9]
I think my grades and academics is to be treated as a checkpost for my entry into the xyz college
I think my grades and academics is to be treated as a checkpost for my entry into the xyz college
gautam007
Dec 12, 2014
Undergraduate / Science, Mathematics is the backbone of any country, it can't be exchanged by History and Literature [3]
Thanks for ur reply
Yah i understand that first i should first put dot then give and start a new line
I will implement it thanks for candor reply
Thanks for ur reply
Yah i understand that first i should first put dot then give and start a new line
I will implement it thanks for candor reply
gautam007
Dec 12, 2014
Undergraduate / Science, Mathematics is the backbone of any country, it can't be exchanged by History and Literature [3]
Science and Mathematics is the backbone of any country .These are prime things which can decide any country economy.As all the present technology implicitly uses the application of science and mathematics.These subject can't be substituted by the History and literature ,as their applications are very narrow .And very few peoples earn livelihood from these subjects.
As Maths and science has constited most of the markets.Be it Information Technology or Research and Development ,mostly they involve the application from these subjects. People gain better prospects of life if they master in these feilds. If we take the example of IT about ten million peoples are employed in these field.They are earning their bettrehalf by mastering these subject .Similar is the case with the R'n'd .Today out seven nobel prizes majority are given to people who had a grip in those subjects As we know can predict our future and make it bettter by the science .Its because of these things today we are able to talk to distant relatives with the help of mobile phone. Its the invention of vehicle that made our life easier .We never forget the contribution of science into the discovery of space programms ,by which we are able to explore the possiblity of life on other planet.
But ,above all the most important thing in life is learning from the past .We can't do the work in best possible manner till we dont know how it was done in the past ? . Here comes the role of history .History teaches us the past .It teaches how we lived in the past .While literature gives the reason of living. As one of the great Writer "Shakespeare" said "we all are the actor and the whole earth is a stage". By this he implies that we on the earth are born to perfom certain task .We have to perform it and one day we will die.Actually literature gives the implicit definition of life .It imagines the life in idyiosyncranic manner,and gives proper direction to it.
Therefore , it can be concluded that may be Science and mathematics are one of the important subject for survival on this earth .But we cant deny the significance of history and literature .It is also as important as of the former because it gives meaning to the life
Science and Mathematics is the backbone of any country .These are prime things which can decide any country economy.As all the present technology implicitly uses the application of science and mathematics.These subject can't be substituted by the History and literature ,as their applications are very narrow .And very few peoples earn livelihood from these subjects.
As Maths and science has constited most of the markets.Be it Information Technology or Research and Development ,mostly they involve the application from these subjects. People gain better prospects of life if they master in these feilds. If we take the example of IT about ten million peoples are employed in these field.They are earning their bettrehalf by mastering these subject .Similar is the case with the R'n'd .Today out seven nobel prizes majority are given to people who had a grip in those subjects As we know can predict our future and make it bettter by the science .Its because of these things today we are able to talk to distant relatives with the help of mobile phone. Its the invention of vehicle that made our life easier .We never forget the contribution of science into the discovery of space programms ,by which we are able to explore the possiblity of life on other planet.
But ,above all the most important thing in life is learning from the past .We can't do the work in best possible manner till we dont know how it was done in the past ? . Here comes the role of history .History teaches us the past .It teaches how we lived in the past .While literature gives the reason of living. As one of the great Writer "Shakespeare" said "we all are the actor and the whole earth is a stage". By this he implies that we on the earth are born to perfom certain task .We have to perform it and one day we will die.Actually literature gives the implicit definition of life .It imagines the life in idyiosyncranic manner,and gives proper direction to it.
Therefore , it can be concluded that may be Science and mathematics are one of the important subject for survival on this earth .But we cant deny the significance of history and literature .It is also as important as of the former because it gives meaning to the life
