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Name: Krithika Kuppusamy
Joined: Dec 31, 2014
Last Post: Jan 5, 2015
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From: United States of America
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KrithikaK   
Jan 5, 2015
Undergraduate / Diversity was something that was not part of my vocabulary until the day I came to the U.S. [5]

Growing up back in Peru taught me to see the world from one perspective.
The day I came here the first thing I noticed (take out comma) after I got out of the airport, was the cross-county cultures.
The different appearance of each individual and how some of them speak a language that was not English. <- not a sentence.
Witnessing people from a variety of cultures and values interact with each other as equals give me a new perspective of the world. Most importantly , I learn how different and unique every person is.

I have been living in the U.S for almost four years now. During these years I had developed a kind of a strange relationship with the question "where are you from?". Most people would answer this question just by saying the place where they were born or the place where they spend most part of their life. The obvious answer in my case is Peru, the place where I was born. However, there are times when saying the name of my home country does not feel right anymore. There are times when I ask myself if I can really claim to be Peruvian when I barely know what is going in my country, when I don't longer understand the slangs that people from my country speak, when visiting my country does not feel the same any more. Every time someone asks me this question I find myself in this internal strugglewhere I can't say where I amfrom anymore. I am not from my home country anymore, but I',also not from here. I don't speak perfect English as most of the kids who were born here do; instead I have a slight Spanish accent as most immigrant kids who just learn the language. I admit that I kind like to have the influence of both cultures, it makes me see the world in a different way, but I also feel stuck in the middle of two totally different cultures that at the end of the day mix between them and make me who I am. <- wordy and repetitive

I am fortunate enough of growing up to grow up with the influence of these two cultures. Moving to the U.S helped not only to accept and respect the different opinion of people, but also helped me to step out of my comfort zone. I am not the shy girl that had a hard time making friends and talking to people. The four years of living in the U.S allowed me to discover myself. I learned to believe in myself and share my thoughts with other people without being afraid of what they may think. Being stuck between two cultures is the greatest thing that happened to me as it allowed me to gain interpersonal and intercultural skills that I could never have acquired by staying in Peru. I hope one day to visit other countries and learn new cultures that allow me to expand my vision of the world.[/quote]
KrithikaK   
Dec 31, 2014
Undergraduate / I am proudest of the service I contributed through my school's Computer Club [2]

I really like your essays! I think the first sentence of your first essay "I am proudest of the service I contributed through my school's Computer Club." just sounds kind of awkward?

And then "I acted as the bridge "

Your why Columbia essay is very specific which is good and your final essay is also well written
Nice job!

Hey also on your third essay "Although the computer would be his , my joy rivaled his ." The double his sounds kind of awkward?

And same with your last sentence on your third essay "Now what but the path of computer engineering (science) could sate this desire?" The what but sounds weird adjacent to each other so maybe insert an else in between? "Now what else but the path of computer engineering could sate this desire?"

Also on the sentence prior to that one, put hyphens instead of parentheses. You get more emphasis and it looks better aesthetically (if that makes any sense). Basically it looks a bit more formal?

Sorry for sounding super nit picky but omg I really love your third essay it flows well and I love how you told the story. :)
KrithikaK   
Dec 31, 2014
Undergraduate / Spongebob band-aids - the one memorable constant of my childhood. Psychology and Biology / Why CMU? [3]

Carnegie Mellon

Please submit a one page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen Carnegie Mellon and your particular major(s), department(s) or program(s). This essay should include the reasons why you've chosen the major(s), any goals or relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. For freshmen applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program to which you are applying. Because our admission committees review applicants by college and program, your essay can impact our final decision. Candidates applying for early decision or transfer may apply to only one college and department.

This is a pretty bad essay I wrote it last minute :(

Spongebob band-aids - the one memorable constant of my childhood. As a child I was prone to injuries and my mother would carefully patch me back up and wipe away my continual tears. Watching her face, always a mix of annoyance and amusement, I felt a sense of awe bubble up within me. This irresistible rapture toward her selfless actions eventually grew into my unconscious desire to fix people, just as she had done.

My inquisitive childish mind viewed what it meant to be aware and how it applied beyond a mere physical sensation. To achieve this state of complete awareness I realized that there was no point in containing my curiosity by limiting it to one particular field or profession. For the past several years, I have been relatively sure on following a path toward practicing medicine, a career that I believed fit me. I grew up watching medical shows, volunteering at hospitals, and interning with an oncologist and later a cardiologist. But I found it wasn't possible to view the world from a strictly biological viewpoint. Rather than focusing on the microscopic, psychology augments and interweaves all three sciences and the unique roles they play in developing the human life.

While many schools of thought, such as engineering, strive to improve human life, psychology seeks to understand it. Instead of merely comprehending facts, psychologists aim to penetrate the mystery of their origin. Why do we act and think the way we do? Nothing interests me more than dabbling with the mind and what drives it. And Carnegie Mellon's College of Humanities and Sciences Psychology department has a myriad of concentrations ranging from Cognitive Neuroscience to Development Psychology. Carnegie Mellon also places a heavy importance on undergraduate research, requiring at least two classes on research methods. It also provides an opportunity to participate in a nationally funded research program to be recruited into the mental-health field. Furthermore by participating in the unified double major program of Psychology and Biology I will be able to sate my passion for both the technical and the intuitive.

At Dietrich College, I see students devoted to learning for its sake. Promoting a heavily interdisciplinary curriculum to foster knowledge in different perspectives, Carnegie Mellon ensures that I am more than just a number. In its uniquely incorporative structure, Dietrich College, despite containing large numbers of undergraduates, would allow me to form connections with those in majors vastly different from mine because of shared classes, or common interests. Carnegie Mellon makes sure that I do not lose my spirit of inquiry in favor of focusing on my major.

Carnegie Mellon prides itself on bringing together the sciences and the arts, allowing students to incorporate both instead of being limited to one. As I delve into the human psyche I would like to analyze the consequences of human behavior through history. From the Black Death to the revolution of motion pictures, studying history would allow me to create a unique niche blending psychology, biology, and social sciences to better comprehend what creates the human self.
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