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tech_girl

Jan 1, 2015

Undergraduate / SmartCase of any color or any print, the back made out of durable gorilla glass-like material [3]

thank you! I was considering doing something like that for the second essay, but I wasn't sure where to fit it in. That did help!

tech_girl

Jan 1, 2015

Undergraduate / Digging deeper beneath the surface opens a pathway to innovation. Cornell's College Application [9]

I'm also applying to Cornell in about a day! (But to the college of engineering). I like where you're going with this essay, but maybe you can fix some transitions. For example, maybe for the paragraph that starts with "looking back at my freshman year...", you can start with something along the lines of "I was not always this way". The paragraph where you you introduce the losing weight thing also kind of came out of no where. I'm sure you can think of ways to connect it a little more. Maybe say "this changed when I decided to lose weight the summer of my sophomore year..."

I hope this helps, and good luck!

If you have time, could you look at mine? It's the two essays for UVa, "chronic procrastinator" is in the title :)

tech_girl

Jan 1, 2015

Undergraduate / SmartCase of any color or any print, the back made out of durable gorilla glass-like material [3]

1.) If you were given funding for a small engineering project that would make your everyday life better, what would you do?

I thought I was keeping a good eye on her, yet she got away. As I watched my friend walk towards the cash register, I ran to stop her, preparing myself to hear her say that she does not have that color, that she has an outfit that needs to be matched, that her $30 allowance comes every week. Before she can say anything, I take the iPhone case out of her hand.

This happens every time we go shopping.

Given the funding, I would want to help my friend, and admittedly, myself, by designing and creating a smartphone case that can be any color or any print, whenever and wherever we want. With either a black or white rim that goes around the phone, the back of this SmartCase will be made out of durable gorilla glass-like material and function much like any other phone screen, displaying any image uploaded to it. Like a rechargeable case, it will remain plugged right into the phone, making it easy to upload images at any time, accept when unplugged to charge. Its background will be controlled by an app on the phone which will send off any picture in your gallery, matching the case to the user's outfit or her mood.

By saving their money for this single purchase, phone-case-aholics like my friend can hold in their hands endless possibilities.

2.) What is your favorite word and why.

MOD comment:One essay at one time please

**These prompts really confuse me. I feel like they don't show very much about me at all, or at least the way I've answered them doesn't. What do others think? Do they have a voice? Are they clear? Are the ideas even any good? The elegance one is very true, that's a true story and elegance really is my favorite word thanks to my comp sci teacher, but do the essays need more? On that note, I read on UVa's website that they want us to go up to the 250 word limit, but these are each a bit under... I would really appreciate any feedback. Thank You!