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Name: Nancy Rojas
Joined: Jan 2, 2015
Last Post: Jan 5, 2015
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From: United States of America
School: PSJA SWECHS

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nrojas2   
Jan 5, 2015
Scholarship / Mathematics and art are a specialty of mine - GMS Essay [2]

Am I answering everything? Is the essay structure correct?
Thank you in advance.
Discuss the subjects in which you excel or have excelled. To what factors do you attribute your success?

My passion for visible perfection is immense. Perfection, in which an ideal of space, symmetry, structure, shape recognition, patterns and beauty is discovered, not only by artistic creations, but by mathematical concepts.

Mathematics and art are a specialty of mine.

I have always had an interest in numbers since they can be applied to basically anything. We live around numbers, our universe is composed of numbers and mathematics is one of the most impressive elements that may have ever existed. The summer of 2013, I took my first math course at a higher level: College Algebra 1414. I was frightened of the fact that from basic Geometrical formulas such as the Pythagorean Theorem, I skipped Algebra 2 to go to very complex Logarithmic Relationships, which by the way it was far from being in my vocabulary. The first day came and I was the only teenager sitting next to students of all ages. Dr. Hassanpour introduced to us the Properties of Exponents and its applications which everyone was familiarized with them by now, but I wasn't. It was a drastic change because everything was new to me and as the days passed everything seemed to be more complicated than they were before. I took the bull by the horns and said to myself, "This is it. Either, I learn the material or I fail the class." Fortunately, throughout all my mathematical academic years I have encountered several excellent and enthusiastic teachers that had a passion for what they do: teach math. Every morning, I arrived to school 1 hour before the class started and went straight to the library to review, redo and study the problems assigned. My routine ended up giving me an A in the class. Since that day, I realized that the art of problem solving came natural to me, I didn't had any problems understanding the concept, nor learning new ones. Currently, I am taking an AP Calculus-AB course with Mr. Barrera and he is just another extraordinary teacher that loves what he does and makes everything simple to understand.

On the other hand, I am the most extremely perfectionist and creative person that you could ever meet and I have this peculiar passion for art in which I find relief whenever I'm over stressed. I have a collection of paintings hanging in my room and a huge box filled with acrylic paints, brushes of different sizes and textures and a fair amount of canvases to do what I love most. I have turned my room into a gallery. Two months ago, my art teacher, Ms. Garza assigned us to draw a Mexican sugar skull for the Day of the Dead on a blank sheet of paper. While everyone was starting to draw their skulls, I got up and went to grab a ruler to draw a couple of grid lines on my paper. As soon as she saw me she got up and asked me, "What do you want to study?" "A combination of Architecture and Engineering, why?" I replied. She answered," Oh, that's why you drew the grid lines on your paper." "Yes, it's because I like everything to be perfect and have symmetry." I said. After that day she insisted me to join the Art Club that she was currently starting. In February, I will be presenting two art pieces of acrylic on canvas on the annual Visual Arts Scholastic Event (VASE) competition. Although, this is my first year as a competitor I am confident that I will end up with successful results because I've been waking up early to go to practice to improve my art skills in order to impress the judges.

I owe this to my enthusiastic teachers that have believed in me and saw the inner passion that I have. Luckily, I have had the best teaching elements to mentor me and encourage me to do what I do best: express myself through art and embrace the satisfaction of solving problems. But, this does not end here I am determined to acquire more knowledge and improve myself on the subjects of mathematics and art.
nrojas2   
Jan 4, 2015
Scholarship / The routine of my family - we are separated from ourselves. Gates Millennium Scholarship Essay [10]

Is there anything else you would like to tell us about that may help us evaluate your nomination (i.e., personal characteristics, obstacles you have overcome)?

It is difficult to get home from school and not see your mom waiting for you at the bus stop, nor to smell the delights of her food as you open the door or even worse, not to feel your dad's kisses while you stand in front of him on your tiptoes. Importantly, to not have those influential persons in your life asking you one simple and essential question: How was school? Imagine all of this happening to six children under the age of eighteen.

It was the fall of 2008, I was 11 and was about to get out of school with hopes that my mom would pick me up, but the worst was yet to come. I went home walking by myself, the hours passed and my mother never arrived. We were desperate and it was already past 7 pm. I will never forget those hours of anticipating that call that she was on her way. My mother was detained by agents in the Reynosa-Hidalgo International Bridge, accused of working illegally in the US. They took away her Visa, she signed her deportation and was sent back to Mexico with a sanction of five years. We were devastated by what happened and we were only able to see our father. After that, my parents decided that it was best for us to go to Pharr every morning to go to school and return to Reynosa; they wouldn't allow us to be alone at night. We had no choice. Things even got worse. We were always late to school due to the long lines at the International Bridge and we got sent to court because of our tardiness. One year later, our nightmare had no end in sight. My dad was detained for no apparent reason. The agents told him that he had a lot of linkages here in the United States; when he brings his kids back to Mexico he would give him his Visa back. But why? Don't we have the right to live and study here since we are US citizens?

It felt like my world was coming to an end, my home country took away both of my parents from our tiny defenseless hands. I was determined to go back to Mexico, but my parents never let me. Eventually, this issue was affecting me in every single manner: emotionally, academically and socially.

Not having my parents by my side made me mature and independent. At a really young age, I learned to take care of myself and my brothers, since we were alone in this journey. I was determined to make my parents feel proud of me by showing them that all the sacrifices they have made are not, nor will be in vain. I took classes that nobody would dare to take and make sure that I was taking advantage of every of all the things the school has to offer. In May, I will be graduating under the Distinguished Achievement Plan and Dual Language Program, with an associate's degree, earning a place on the top 7% of my class and with a GPA of 4.0. Thanks to this situation now I have aspirations and expectations of who, what and how I want to be. I want to be an Architectural Engineer and I am sure that with all the devotion I have put into school, I will make it happen and make them feel proud of me. Now, I realize how grateful I am to be given the chance that many people want: fulfill the American Dream.

Even now, my parents are still not allowed to legally cross the United States, but we go visit them every weekend. Despite that, there is no need to feel sorry for me because being considered an immigrant here in the United States coming from Mexico, I am constantly craving for a better future with the strive for higher education. The American Dream is not working on crop fields, but it is studying and building a more comfortable life for your family. I get frustrated whenever I hear my peers proudly shouting that they will go work on labor fields or oil rings after graduating from high school and knowing that they came to this country with the same desires as me, but not having this sense of achieving excellence by already having the keys in their hands. It even frustrates me more knowing the struggles that many of their parents had to go through to raise them here and for them not to take advantage of each opportunity put in front them.

I want and will make my parents proud of me.
nrojas2   
Jan 3, 2015
Scholarship / The routine of my family - we are separated from ourselves. Gates Millennium Scholarship Essay [10]

Is this better?

It is difficult to get home from school and not see your mom waiting for you at the bus stop, nor to smell the delights of her food as you open the door or even worse, not to feel your dad's kisses while you stand in front of him on your tiptoes. Importantly, to a have those influential persons in your life asking you one simple and essential question: How was school? Imagine all of this happening to six children under the age of eighteen.

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nrojas2   
Jan 2, 2015
Letters / awake "like a cucumber" - From Russia with love [5]

I simply love you essay from beginning to end. It describes a lot about you and your culture and it makes me wonder all those traditions and make me want to look them up on the internet. Very good and good luck!
nrojas2   
Jan 2, 2015
Undergraduate / The life of a middle class family is like a roller coaster - my 1st essay for transfer application. [5]

"..from my short work experience.."

"..it has its some terrible moments.."
Try to delete unnecessary words because you take out the focus on the meaning of the sentence.

Punctuation Errors
"After all this being said the life of a middle
class family is like a roller coaster, it has its some terrible moments but ,they always end up
in showing the families a positive attitude towards life. At the same time the peace of mind
of a middle class family has is something no one could buy. "
nrojas2   
Jan 2, 2015
Scholarship / The routine of my family - we are separated from ourselves. Gates Millennium Scholarship Essay [10]

Can anyone please review my essay and give me feedback asap? Am I on the right track? Did I wrote too much?
Is there anything else you would like to tell us about that may help us evaluate your nomination (i.e., personal characteristics, obstacles you have overcome)?

It is difficult to get home from school and not see your mom waiting for you at the bus stop, nor smell the delights of her food as you open the door or even worse not feel your dad's kisses while you stand in front of him on your tiptoes. Importantly, don't have those influential persons in your life asking you one simple and essential question: How was school? Imagine all of this happening to six children under the age of eighteen.

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