SherlockLegends
Jan 9, 2015
Scholarship / Everything we do affects our success and our failure as well as our future. APIASF Scholarship [7]
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I change depends on the setting, whether I migrate from the other side of the world where the languages and cultures are different, or face a challenge that forces me out of my comfort zone; either way I always find a way to get through it.
In comparison to Philippines, where everyone is practically speaks the same language to live in harmony and tackle the vile obstruction of agony, the language barrier when I moved in to Hawaii is where I mostly changed. When I moved in to Hawaii, my first affliction was the language and the communication. I was marked as a FOB (Fresh of the Boat), a term to degrade immigrant kids. As a FOB, I receive some unwanted attentions due to the barrier and my shy personality; everyone was asking me about where I came from or something related to Philippines. It seemed like they were talking to me in a language that my brain doesn't comprehend and just placed me down in a bedlam. My only response was to slowly nod, meticulously saying "Yes", or acquiesces to their question. It was torture to encounter that situation every day. At that point, I realized that I don't have to deal with that situation anymore, which made me realized that I had to become my own teacher and teach myself. After innumerable times of listening to people's discourse of the language, I eventually gradually learned the divine diction of English, and an unexplainable feeling struck me-- an extravagant enjoyment feeling that tasted like the fruit of my perseverance after months of slaving over the dictionary like a scholar trying to cryptanalyze the code of discovery. I was forced to teach and change myself with knowledge helped me adapt my environment, in my case, learning the English language. Though my accent remains, it is an indication of my growth to language literacy. I had a new goal when I learned the language, which is mastering the language, be persuasive and silver-tonged. I thirst for eloquence and fluency after realizing the significance and strength of words and communication.
Through that ordeal, I didn't just change myself from speaking a language, but also, I learned how to be independent-which helps me for the rest of my life. The barrier hindered to everything that I wanted to fulfill. I wanted to learn more; I wanted to make friends; I wanted to be somebody, and not just a typical shy person in the corner; I wanted to break my shell, but I couldn't because of the barrier. However, in the end, my whole personality rapidly grew after breaking down the barrier. I changed myself from being invisible in the corner to the center of competitive honor roll ranking whose desire is to be eminent and show my undeveloped potentials. I changed myself by trying to step up my games through participating in all sorts of activities. And most of all, I changed myself because I wanted to be more.
Here is the updated version of the essay. Thank you so much for helping me. I'm hoping to receive another feedback.
I change depends on the setting, whether I migrate from the other side of the world where the languages and cultures are different, or face a challenge that forces me out of my comfort zone; either way I always find a way to get through it.
In comparison to Philippines, where everyone is practically speaks the same language to live in harmony and tackle the vile obstruction of agony, the language barrier when I moved in to Hawaii is where I mostly changed. When I moved in to Hawaii, my first affliction was the language and the communication. I was marked as a FOB (Fresh of the Boat), a term to degrade immigrant kids. As a FOB, I receive some unwanted attentions due to the barrier and my shy personality; everyone was asking me about where I came from or something related to Philippines. It seemed like they were talking to me in a language that my brain doesn't comprehend and just placed me down in a bedlam. My only response was to slowly nod, meticulously saying "Yes", or acquiesces to their question. It was torture to encounter that situation every day. At that point, I realized that I don't have to deal with that situation anymore, which made me realized that I had to become my own teacher and teach myself. After innumerable times of listening to people's discourse of the language, I eventually gradually learned the divine diction of English, and an unexplainable feeling struck me-- an extravagant enjoyment feeling that tasted like the fruit of my perseverance after months of slaving over the dictionary like a scholar trying to cryptanalyze the code of discovery. I was forced to teach and change myself with knowledge helped me adapt my environment, in my case, learning the English language. Though my accent remains, it is an indication of my growth to language literacy. I had a new goal when I learned the language, which is mastering the language, be persuasive and silver-tonged. I thirst for eloquence and fluency after realizing the significance and strength of words and communication.
Through that ordeal, I didn't just change myself from speaking a language, but also, I learned how to be independent-which helps me for the rest of my life. The barrier hindered to everything that I wanted to fulfill. I wanted to learn more; I wanted to make friends; I wanted to be somebody, and not just a typical shy person in the corner; I wanted to break my shell, but I couldn't because of the barrier. However, in the end, my whole personality rapidly grew after breaking down the barrier. I changed myself from being invisible in the corner to the center of competitive honor roll ranking whose desire is to be eminent and show my undeveloped potentials. I changed myself by trying to step up my games through participating in all sorts of activities. And most of all, I changed myself because I wanted to be more.
