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Name: Digvijay More
Joined: Jan 9, 2015
Last Post: Jan 9, 2015
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From: Iceland
School: Fergusson College

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digvijaymore   
Jan 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY -WHAT CHANGE WILL 21ST CENTURAY BRING? [2]

The essay as a whole is fairly impressive but try changing the beginning of the second sentence. Instead of "AS per my observation" try "I've observed that".
digvijaymore   
Jan 9, 2015
Undergraduate / I wake up everyday in the morning hoping to fulfill my desire to progress as a human being [2]

Georgia Tech's motto is 'Progress and Service' what does it mean to you?

After thinking for about 2-3 hours this is all I could come up with. If there are any suggestions and changes you guys think I should make, please let me know

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Everyone wakes up in the morning hoping to achieve something in life.In my case, that 'something' is my desire to progress as a human being. Change is not always progress, but progress requires change. For me, progress means a change that you make in your life to be a better version of yourself. Whether it is helping my sister with her homework or volunteering at a local institution that fights HIV/AIDS I progress greatly by learning new skills, discovering new layers of myself, and recognizing my potential and influence on others. But progress on its own, without any service will become meaningless. Service is bringing smile to an unfortunate soul and progress is appearance of smile on your face seeing that smile Being able to contribute back to society as you develop doesn't just give value to progress, but it is also an act of gratitude to society for everything they have done for us.

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