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Writing task 2 : Encouraging young people to work or travel [3]
Begin your essay with the topic sentence.
Then collect ideas about how this helps young people (adavantages) and write them in paragraphs in order to make the body of the essay. Theses paragraphs should consist of topix sentence of what you are going to write in them.
In the end, conclude what u have already written. I mean summary of your thoughts . Donot add anything new.
hope it helps:)
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Successful completion of master degree and Griffith's master's program is integral to my goals [4]
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Thank u so much for ur response. i added some more in the following paragraph in my pursuing my interest. will it be enough?:
Being brought up in a developing country like Pakistan has already made me conscious about the environment and sustainability issues and has always made me concerned about the environmental issues related to urbanization and human population growth. While living in Thailand, I learned how the urban structure, land use, traffic jams and water drainage has been changing the environment in the past few years. This is undoubtedly one of the motivations for studying in a developed country as Australia. More significantly, that Pakistan is a developing country has generated various weaknesses in urban and infrastructure system which are illogical comprehension planning and zoning, traffic jams, downgrading of urban road and environmental pollution. Thus, it is undoubtedly that after completing the Master program in Australia, I will be able to record much more tools in urban planning and certain level of knowledge in society management which shall create opportunity and confidence necessary to work and contribute to the innovation of my region.
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Successful completion of master degree and Griffith's master's program is integral to my goals [4]
Need proofreading for my sop for masters degree in Australia for visa application
My name is .... and I am a born citizen of Pakistan. I belong to a noble Christian family. Being the eldest amongst the siblings, I carry a sense of responsibility towards my family and myself, and have always strived to be amongst the finest of students. My previous results are a reflection of my Academic Character. I did my Matriculation in 2004 from .... I passed my Intermediate education in 2006 also from .... and then worked hard for my Bachelor of Science (Honors) with Major in Biology that I passed successfully from ...University in 2010. After having done my graduation, I completed M.Phil. in Environmental Sciences from a renowned institution ... in 2013. At the same time, I could not resist my love for multicultural environment so I moved to Thailand. Learning a foreign language and getting soaked into an entirely new culture has helped me a lot to become an open-minded and understanding individual and is a fantastic experience where I started seeing the world and environment from a different perspective. Since I have been interacted with several nationalities, I can develop a variety of viewpoints to solve problems.
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MANY teenagers today do not listen to adults' advice do not have a sense of responsibillity [3]
Begin your essay with the topic sentence.
Then collect three ideas and write them in three paragraphs in order to make the body of the essay. Theses paragraphs should consist of topix sentence of what you are going to write in them.
In the end, conclude what u have already written. I mean summary of your thoughts . Dont add anything new.
hope it helps:)
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