Writing Feedback / Over-grazing of agricultural land was the main cause of its degradation in the nineteen nineties. [2]

What you have written about is the actual pie graph shown. The pie graph gives us all of the information that we need, so we do not necessarily need three paragraphs about the pie chart.The paragraphs need to be about what is over-cultivation, over-grazing, and deforestation. You will need to write what these acts are and then what areas are affected by them. Have one paragraph for each item that includes a definition and an example of it, and then talk about which country is affected the most by the act.

Writing Feedback / Trending of high class building [2]

Sentence 1) Change imposing to styles .Sentence 2) It is construction, not contraction. You construct a building. Sentence 3) However, others believe that variety of modern buildings will destroy towns' scenery., because many building are slum. Sentence 4) I would rewrite the sentence because I do not know which way you are leaning towards. Are you for no new construction or more construction of modern buildings?

Grammar, Usage / 1. Biology had given me the fundamental yet interesting knowledge' - Grammar correction in sentences [5]

1. hadhas given me the fundamental yet interesting knowledge about
2. I decided to focus on genetic subjects, [i]which interest me the most. By learning it, I had knowledge and then put more attention to diseases affected by genetics mutation.

3. in health related areas like working
4. I wish to discover the cause of as many diseases as possible.
5. Add "the" after in
6. It is not a complete sentence. What happened when you accompanied your mom to the hospital?
7 No changes
8. Introduced to me about the importance of encouraging
9. Add a space between implement and these
10-12. Explain better how the music activity would bring funding to your wall magazine.

Writing Feedback / Evaluation of today's urbanization. Are modern buildings ruin our cities or towns? [4]

Sentence 1, pluralize building. It is buildings. Sentence 2, remove "are" from the sentence. It is unnecessary. Sentence 3, demolishes should be a different word, like devalues. Hideous buildings are not destroying cities, but they can devalue them. The last sentence should not be your opinion about whether cities benefit modern buildings or not. It should introduce the idea that you are going to talk about the pros and cons of having modern buildings in the city. A simple sentence stating that there are many pros and cons to having modern buildings in a city will do, and then you can launch into the body of the essay with a paragraph about the pros and a paragraph about the cons.