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Name: Nicolle Perez
Joined: Sep 9, 2015
Last Post: Sep 11, 2015
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From: United States
School: Mater Lakes Academy

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nicolleperez   
Sep 11, 2015
Grammar, Usage / 'career in family medicine..' - help me check this sentence or re-write it [5]

Due to lack of experience in treating patients with mental illnesses, commonly seen in family practice, I worked as a psychiatric fellow for several years after beginning my career in family medicine.

You can choose to remove the ", commonly seen in family practice" it sounds good with or without it.
nicolleperez   
Sep 9, 2015
Undergraduate / Ambition describes me - UCF Undergraduate Essay Revision/Advice [4]

4. What qualities or unique characteristics do you possess that would allow you to contribute to the UCF community?
Your personal statement should be no longer than a total of 500 words or 7000 characters for both statements combined. The best personal statements are not necessarily the longest ones.

If there is one word that could describe me, it would most likely be ambitious. I have always lived my life with a strong desire and determination to thrive. I want to succeed in everything that I do and be the best at it. I'm ambitious and set high standards for myself. I have always tried to live my life with this quote in mind by Mark Twain: "Keep away from those who try to belittle your ambitions. Small people always do that, but the really great make you believe that you too can become great." I always intend to satisfy high aspirations for myself in order to achieve.

I believe ambition is an important characteristic to obtain. A determined attitude can lead anyone to success and satisfaction. Zeal, being enthusiastic in pursuing a cause or an objective, is not only about dreaming to be on top of the world, it is to have the will and the courage to reach your goals in life. I display zeal by being proactive and taking advantage of my time. These skills go hand in hand with leadership. One must be a leader in order to continue on the path of success.

I can contribute these qualities to the UCF community in a numerous amounts of ways. I would initially join clubs and organizations within the university. If one person has the ambition and is willing to lead a group, there is no stopping them. Their drive to accomplish what they want to do will only get stronger from that point out. One thing I love to do is is volunteer and serve others. Volunteering is something I'm passionate about because it feels like I am contributing back to the organization, society and or in this case, the school. If I were accepted into this prestigious university, I would set time apart to volunteer and help out in whichever way I am needed. It is a wonderful thing being able to give back to others and I believe it is the right thing to do.