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Posts by wulanaulia
Name: Wulan Aulia Azizah
Joined: Nov 6, 2015
Last Post: Nov 8, 2015
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From: Indonesia
School: Lambung Mangkurat University

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wulanaulia   
Nov 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people [5]

Hi @eddies thank you so much for your help.
I have several questions
1. How can i make a good sentence in introduction? I just know that doesnt matter if i directly task response with the question.
2. Should the Body 1 and 2 have similar discussion? Actually i just wanna give example.
Thank you for your advance vocab @eddies

Hi @luthfia yeah, i think so, youre my next door.hihihi
Thank you fia, i got a wrong response right.
wulanaulia   
Nov 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS-TASK1 : Persons Arrested in Five Years ending 1994 [5]

Hai nofrinorman. Youre writing already good, but i just have a little correction. Enjoy your day 😊😊

... 36.5% whereas males arewere approximately 31%. Then the second case is drinkdouble verb driving which is more ... Next the third case isI think should use past tense, because it talk about individual arrested in 1994 assault, it is unexpected as the bar chart illustrates that females lead to number of presentation over 19% and males by 3%.
wulanaulia   
Nov 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people [5]

Earlier technological development brought more benefits changes to the life of ordinary people than the recent technological development will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In this era, technology becomes hot issues in worldwide. Some people believe that past technological development gave more advantages towards the life of common people than recent technology. Following this, I fully disagree that recent technological development give drawback to change the life of usual people.

First of all, it is undoubted that current technology makes a simple way of life for common people. For example, the differences between typewriter and computer, which are typewriter as earlier technology and computer as recent technology. In the past, people should type word by word carefully, for there is no excuse for making mistake on paper. If they make an error, they should repeat their writing from beginning with using new paper. By contrast, every person can make everything that they want by emerging nowadays technology. Not only can write easily without thinking about mistakes, but also there are several applications which are given by computers, such as games, calculators, and musics. Therefore, it shows clearly that recent technology affords to help life movement of people to be meaningful.

Moreover, current technology can reduce busy work, so can be more productive. For instance, many students and workers have a tight schedule to do their assignment. By using Google doc, they can still finish their job. Google doc is an application that does not need gathering for accomplishing the assignment. It only needs connection network. They can correct their assignment each others on the same paper. Therefore, it can gives a more time for people to spent their time with their relatives. From this statement, it is obviously that recent technological development outweight to change the way of people life to be better.

In summary, earlier technological lacks needed to develop for enhancing the quality of life common. Thus it is clear why the recent technology is more benefits to support a movement of people life to be productive and effective.
wulanaulia   
Nov 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / The quantity of students which join in the Secondary School, in three different years [3]

Hello Meiliana enjoy your day

This table displayed the quantity of students whichwho join in the Secondary School, in three different years.
based on Simon, it is better task 1 divides into 4 paragraph. Introduction, conclusion, bodies 1 and bodies 2

Overall, there are essential changes in calculation of each schoolyou can explain more,but without mention number .

... of student's presence are slightly decreasedecreased it is past tense of from year 2000 to 2009.
... the number of declining is very extreme, it has ...

In the second year, it has rosedouble verb more than twice as the first one.
wulanaulia   
Nov 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - People can be happy if they have an enjoyment job [5]

... some people believe that they have toavoid Ehave to) in writing IELTS, use (better) do something they like

... in many aspects of their lives live.

... capability, will cause stressful and lowering I think it is not good ...

... enthusiasm and willing to do another tasks another task or other tasks.

Despite that in spite of that, environments ...

To illustrate, a magazine writer need needs a conducive place to write his project while the situation surrounds him isdouble verbaround him is surrounded by his colleagues chattering in a loud sound.

... a job, there are a lot ofavoid this word in writing IELST, you can change to be many or several things that people ...

Anotherother people will feel happy ...
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