Writing Feedback / The more population a country have, the more amount of water will be used. Cambridge IELTS 6 Test 1 [2]

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Cambridge IELTS 6 Test 1 Writing Test 1

The line graph compares and contrasts data on the changes in the amount of water consumption in worldwide according to three categories(agriculture, industry and domestic) over a 100-year-period from 1900 to 2000. And, the table shows information about the use of water in two countries namely Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo in 2000.

Overall, there were increasing trends of water consumption in all three sectors throughout the period.
The largest amount of water was used by agricultural processes. It stated the period with 500 km3 followed by a steady rise to 1000km3 in 1950 and then it surged dramatically to 3000 km3 in 2000. Industrial and domestic sectors remained nearly the same under 200 km3 until 1950. Then, the consumption of water by industries rose significantly throughout the period and reached to 1000 km3 in 2000, whereas that of domestic sector reported 300 km3 at the end of the period.

From the table, the populations of Brazil and Congo in 2000 were 176 million and 5.2 million respectively. There were 100 km2 of irrigated land in Congo while Brazil had more than 265 times more than Congo did. Although the amount of water used by each person in Congo showed only 8m3, that of Brazilian claimed about 49 times more than Congo.(359 m3).

It can be said from the data that, the more population a country have, the more amount of water will be used.

Writing Feedback / Men have much more leisure time than women. Cambridge IELTS 2 Test 2 Writing Task 1 [4]

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Cambridge IELTS 2 Test 2 Writing Task 1

The given bar chart compares and contrasts data in the differences of amount of leisure time per week spent by men and women with various employment status in the period between 1998 and 1999.

Generally speaking, it can be seen clearly from the data that men spent much more leisure time than women.
The number of weekly hours spent on leisure activities by both of unemployed and retired people are the same for both sexes reporting 85 hours for men and 80 hours for women. They claimed the biggest amount in all categories. The women who worked full time consumed 38 hours per week for leisure and the amount of leisure time hours of the ones with part time job is slightly higher than them mentioning 40 hours per week which was only a half of unemployed ones. The amount of leisure times used by men who worked full time was much higher than women.( 50 hours weekly). And, the housewives spent more time for leisure activities than employed ones showing 60 hours per week.

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