Writing Feedback / If the world was ruled by female leaders, it would have been peaceful. Is it true? [3]

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Male leaders have only led us to violence and wars. If the world was ruled by female leaders, it would have been peaceful. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is found that, since the ancient period of time, men have ruled over the world and many wars have taken place during their rule. Many believe that the main reason behind all the conflicts and wars is the fact that men dominated the world and if women were the leaders, there would always be peace and harmony. I believe that the gender of the leaders do not determine their actions and the opportunity to be a leader should be based on the qualifications, moral values and leadership skills of the person rather than their gender.

Firstly, all male leaders have not led the world to wars and conflict. Wars were more common in the period of male leadership than female leadership as women have received little to none opportunities to become a leader. The crowning of leaders used to be gender-based presuming that females are incapable of ruling due to their fragile nature. Owing to this, leaders were chosen according to their genders rather than their values and beliefs. This partial system gave opportunities for degenerated male leaders to oppress the nations and started wars for their insatiable desires to conquer the world. This necessarily does not prove that all male leaders are amoral. There are many examples of male leaders, who have fought for peace and harmony like Nelson Mandela, Martin Luther King Jr., Mahatma Gandhi, Muhammad Ali and many more.

Secondly, this also does not mean that female leaders are, in anyway, inferior to male leaders. There are various examples of female figures, such as Mother Teresa, Malala Yousafzai, Aung Sang Suu Kyi, Susan B. Anthony and many more, who have contributed the world peace. However, there are some female leaders, like Queen Elizabeth, who disrupted peace and brought tumult caused by conflicts in many nations. The world has been facing violence and wars mainly because there is a dearth of equality between male and female leaders. If females also obtain equal opportunities as male in every sector then only worthy individuals can be the leaders of the nations.

To put it briefly, wars are indeed more common under male leadership but this neither indicates that all male leaders are responsible to political conflicts nor proves that all female leaders will definitely lead us to peace. Instead, it signifies that the system of ruling and choosing the leaders has been biased until now. I believe that peace and security of a nation can be obtained only when leaders are appointed on the basis of their virtue, expertise and principles.

Writing Feedback / Unhealthy lifestyle has been an increasing trend. Who should guide kids in the right direction? [4]

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Parents and schools are both equally responsible for unhealthy lifestyle of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Unhealthy lifestyle has been an increasing trend in the world these days. The children are also affected to a great extend. Many people argue that school and parents are equally responsible for the unhealthy lifestyle of the children. I strongly agree with this statement, as I believe children are immature and do not have the foresight to think about the consequences of their actions and they require counseling by both parents and schools.

As being the main caretaker of the children, parents are a tremendous influence on their children. They imitate their parents and if they live a healthy lifestyle, the children would also learn from them and live a healthy lifestyle as well. Children are malleable and fragile beings so they are shaped on the basis of the environment that is provided to them and the type of people they spend most of their time with. Parents are responsible for what their children eats and drinks. If the parents could spend more time with their children and engage the in outdoor activities, a significant improvement in their healthy can be observed in just a matter of few months.

Children tend to spend more of their time in the school rather than with their parents. In order to satisfy the demands of the children, parents have to work for more hours and they are not able to spend much time with their children. They entrust their children to the schools hoping that they would be able to improve their academics as well as their health. Children are also found to be more obedient towards teachers than their parents. The schools have the advantage to control the student's behavior over the parents.

In sum, I believe that the weight of responsibility of the children's lifestyle fall equally upon both parents and schools as each plays an important role in to guide and discipline the children.