fash2468
May 31, 2016
Scholarship / Topic says: how will you fund your living cost. I need a review for the essay [4]
I am glad for the review, helpful
I am glad for the review, helpful
fash2468
May 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. [4]
It was so bothering for me and I redid tests again by myself (initial sentence)
It was so bothering for me that I had to repeat the tests alone afterwards.(my own opinion)
Finally, there is a further more subtle point [...] with itself and couldn't save even a little.
In conclusion, this point is significant. Hiring a teacher requires time and money. A teacher will want you to dress decently to class always. Your time and energy maybe wasted due to distraction when you study alone. You will have comfort, time to study and less distraction when you study alone. Also, registering for classes cost a lot, which will be a concern because of my low income. For example, my classes last year, that was where my income was spent and couldn't save money. (my own opinion)
It was so bothering for me and I redid tests again by myself (initial sentence)
It was so bothering for me that I had to repeat the tests alone afterwards.(my own opinion)
Finally, there is a further more subtle point [...] with itself and couldn't save even a little.
In conclusion, this point is significant. Hiring a teacher requires time and money. A teacher will want you to dress decently to class always. Your time and energy maybe wasted due to distraction when you study alone. You will have comfort, time to study and less distraction when you study alone. Also, registering for classes cost a lot, which will be a concern because of my low income. For example, my classes last year, that was where my income was spent and couldn't save money. (my own opinion)
fash2468
May 30, 2016
Scholarship / Topic says: how will you fund your living cost. I need a review for the essay [4]
As a child, growing up in the family of five children has been challenging in Nigeria. My parents work hard to ensure that we all have formal education and be people of veracity in life. I have also nurture the dream of studying outside the country since I was a little boy. But, my dream is being held, because I am not the only child with great aspirations in the family. I am the second child out of the five children, my parent knew about my dream to study outside the country when I was in my first year at the University. My Father is a University Professor, and he supports my dream, knowing fully well the benefits of studying outside Africa.
He encourages me often and explains the importance of studying hard so as to get a scholarship that can help me achieve my dreams. I remember he uses himself as an illustration of a missed opportunity. He was awarded a scholarship when he was about my age to study his first degree in America, because of the exceptional performances in his education. Due to the uneducated parents he had, he was denied access to funds for traveling and living expenses. So, he made a promise to his children that, if any of us should do well to get a grant, he will fund the living expenses. I remember he says to me, "if you want to study outside Nigeria, do well to look for opportunities and make sure you don't miss it". My father is supportive of my dreams and ambition. My parents and guardian are the ones funding my living expenses in the United Kingdom. With my offer at the University, my parents are in support of me getting a full tuition grant. They have agreed to fully support me, if granted a scholarship. They will have love to fund every expenses, because of the necessities of my siblings and other extended family members, they will not be able to do that, without inconveniencing the rest of the family.
As a child, growing up in the family of five children has been challenging in Nigeria. My parents work hard to ensure that we all have formal education and be people of veracity in life. I have also nurture the dream of studying outside the country since I was a little boy. But, my dream is being held, because I am not the only child with great aspirations in the family. I am the second child out of the five children, my parent knew about my dream to study outside the country when I was in my first year at the University. My Father is a University Professor, and he supports my dream, knowing fully well the benefits of studying outside Africa.
He encourages me often and explains the importance of studying hard so as to get a scholarship that can help me achieve my dreams. I remember he uses himself as an illustration of a missed opportunity. He was awarded a scholarship when he was about my age to study his first degree in America, because of the exceptional performances in his education. Due to the uneducated parents he had, he was denied access to funds for traveling and living expenses. So, he made a promise to his children that, if any of us should do well to get a grant, he will fund the living expenses. I remember he says to me, "if you want to study outside Nigeria, do well to look for opportunities and make sure you don't miss it". My father is supportive of my dreams and ambition. My parents and guardian are the ones funding my living expenses in the United Kingdom. With my offer at the University, my parents are in support of me getting a full tuition grant. They have agreed to fully support me, if granted a scholarship. They will have love to fund every expenses, because of the necessities of my siblings and other extended family members, they will not be able to do that, without inconveniencing the rest of the family.
