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Posts by Vips
Name: VIPS
Joined: Aug 9, 2016
Last Post: Aug 10, 2016
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Vips   
Aug 10, 2016
Graduate / How my town takes care of the environment [4]

Hello Krishansharma198,

the topic is beautiful and I presume it has to be written about the things you are doing differently than others, I noted the second para spoke about the problems with people using plastic bags.

You can talk about
1. organic farming
2. use of public transport
3. older vehicles not used.
4. people prefer walking.
5. focus on cleaning.
6. lesser use of fertilizers etc

changes-
People needs could change to people need. or may be instead of first sentence write " A clean environment is desired for a healthy life."
Vips   
Aug 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / Family has a bigger influence on young teens than friends. Present your agreement or disagreement. [7]

Hello @justivy03 ,
Thanks for warm welcome and writing a response.

I find it amazing how you interpreted the logic behind the writing (gets to show your experience in the game!)

Do you think /suggest for essay writing like the one above , we should be covering both agree and disagree before drawing conclusion.

I am focussing on IELTS so would be happy to know related experiences if any!
Vips   
Aug 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / Family has a bigger influence on young teens than friends. Present your agreement or disagreement. [7]

Adolescence is an important milestone in an individual's life. Their decisions so far is a result of experiences and habits they absorb from family and friends. In my view, the significant impact in their life can be linked with family . This effect can be observed in their ability to differentiate between what suits them most and plan their life events like choice of schooling.

Role of family is just not to provide a safer environment for the sibling but also help them learn to identify what is good and what is not so good. Parents often share their life experience at different stages to help them use this as an anecdote. For example, the value of money and saving helps them throughout life. This type of moral learning can only be learnt at home and not outside.

Additionally, learning from experiences in family help youngsters to focus on a skill set and master ability at a particular form of career later on. As an example, musicians often learn from their family influences to perfect an instrument. Discipline in one's activity and dedication can be shared with them while growing up. Evidently this helps them to choose career since they know better tricks of the trade and they see examples of success in the family.

From this, it can be gathered that role of family in shaping teenager behaviour is deep-rooted. The type of choices they make in professional career and moral values can only be learnt at home with the people that know them well.
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