Writing Feedback / A work that can give minimum salary should be obtained by people who remain jobless [2]

Hi kobayakawa07, here are some advice I would like to give you. If you have any question, feel free to ask ;)

Some parts of the society argue that work that can give fine salary should be obtained by people who do not have any job while others, however, claim that these jobs are dishonourable.

In this essay, I will declare that giving good work to unemployed humans is an excellent idea since it helps decrease the number of crime though lack of budget could be a big problem.

Declining crime level is one of the positive effects that can be obtained.

You should get rid of this sentence: If people have no idea to get welfare payments, they can become thief.

For example, According to a police report (...) and of unemployed people: When the number of crime fell down (by) 30 per cent, the number of unemployed people in such area decreased.

Nevertheless, many companies which hire unemployed people can be closed because the companies cannot give enough salary to all labourers.

Those firms' budgets are likely to experience unbalance between income and outcome when the latter is greater than the former.

For instance , a research (...) reveals that virtually, half of the companies in Texas stopped ...

It was researchers' belief that such fact occurred since the local government forced them to hire unemployed people

In conclusion, while some people claim that jobs which can give (...) policy will make many firms put an end to their activities. In my book, I believe that making unemployed people work ...