Writing Feedback / Teenage violence in schools [2]

Teenage violence in schools has become tremendous concern to many people. Nowadays , most people choose the alternative education progrmas such as home-schooling to prevent their children from violence in schools. According to psychological research, there are two main reasons of violence in schools are : family and TV. Because of these reasons, some problems occur in school life. Students don't want to go school or start to imitate these ''rebelious children'' in order to dis obey rules.

Personality develops early in life. That is why early aggression and antisocial behavior should be taken seriosly. Firstly, education starts in family. Family lifestyle or behaviour of member within the familyhave been shown to have direct affect on a teehager's behaviour in school. Children can be influenced very easily by any older person, especially family member, because they always look up to that family members. Adolences observe their parents'behaviours. I person in the family is involved in criminal activity, children become interested in doing same thing. Teenagers also commit acts of violence to get their parent'S attention. Secondly, TV violence is contributing factor to aggresive behaviours in teenagers. They turn to TV for lack of relationship with their friends or after school activities. Children who view many violnt programs tend to use aggresion to resolve conflict. Children see many violent characters as attractive or heroic and often tend to imitate them.

Because of these reasons, children affect violence in schools. Today most students don't want to go school because of their fears. They are scared that one day become victims. Also their parents believe that tehir children start to trear like these bad boys or girls because they know that teenagers can be affected easily each other

In conclusion, In the 1980's teenagers were in troble for chewing gum or getting out line but schools have changed dramatically. In the 2000's teenagers get in troble for drugs,gun,robbery or bombings. Governments should take a control for reducing or stopping teenagers violence . Rehabilition programs are very good idea for these children.

Writing Feedback / "Computer or book"? Computer [2]

it is my other essay I think it is better than destruction of greenhouse. thank'S you for helping :)

Today,computer is the most important invention since fire was invented. Most people use computer instead of book. According to school research,students choose computer to do their homework. Some people believe that books are more useful than computers. However, this research indicate that children and teenagers benefit from computer more than book. Therefore, schools should purchase computer rather tan compiling library because of two main reason:students can reach every information without spending waste time and they able to use computer when they do their homework.

Recently,techonolgy has been developing. Therefore schools shoul obey modern world's rule. They should prefer computer because firstly, today all documents and datas are written on computer especially internet. people share their countless source by using internet. In addition, books are read in the internet. all of this acknowledge shows tahat computers and internet are treasure for students. For example, when a student want to search his homework topic such as history of art or Atatïrk's life. He can just read one book because of deadline.Homework he can access all information about his homework by using internet website include in articals pictures or short films. All of these are good reason to choose computer.

Secondly,today bussiness life want employees who are aable to use computer because all companies, bussiness men use computer in order to connect with other companies. If children learn computer in early year, they can improve using computer skills from day to day. In the future all people will be controling their job from computer. Today most people know reading but how many people know using computer?

To sum up, school has a big part of children's lives. Therefore school managers should spend money to built computer lab. They should give a change to their students to save time and learn computer. If students spend less time for their homework by using computer, they can join after school activities such as playing basketball with peer

Writing Feedback / DESTRUCTION OF GREENHOUSE; Earth has loosen his source. [6]

Earth has loosen his source. every year, people are injured by natural disasters such as floods,erosion etc. However scientific research indicate that reason of natural disasters is human activity because human break down natural balance. People destroy natural sources without thinking their future. Especially forests which are ruined more than other sources. People get rid of forests compeletly for two reason ;find new accomodation and earn money. Therefore if governments want to protect forests, they should improve their tecnique and law.

mother of nature never hurts itselves. Although people need fresh air to live, they can cut these trees to built new apartmans. Because of overpopulation creates different problem which is accomodation needs. People start to fire forests lack of bare place. today, reason of forest fire is human approximately %97. In addition, people need money to survive. When they can't find appropriate place for agriculture or earing money. they cut trees to earn money initally,after that , they use these places for agriculture. However those forget that they are not only sell their product such as tomato,strawbery or wheat but also their future.

All of these reasons show that governments should make decision to protect greenhouse.Firstly, they should improve their equipments. For example they should adjust barget and save money to purchase fire-plane.Secondly ,government educate their staff who work in team of forest so these people will know what they do when forest-fire starts. Thirdly,governments should put strict rules and they shoul monitor forest-place. In this way they can arrest criminal who ruin forests

To sum up, people influence world's future because they disobey natural rule. Most people always consume natural source without producting new ones. Therefore they will lost their forests include in fresh-air. If nobody stop this situation,new generation will pay money for air.