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Masters in Neuroscience - Motivational letter for Neurasmus

2 - The motivational letter is going around in circles. You have missed the point of the motivational letter. It is...

GraduateHaileLeo - Nov 13, 2023Holt - Nov 27, 2023
What is your motivation to apply for UWC?

2 - I do not believe that you are responding to the question. You have delivered your community participation background. However,...

UndergraduateAfag Mamedova - Nov 12, 2023Holt - Nov 27, 2023
talking about cyberbullying the effects and what kids go through

2 - Cyberbullying is the act of bullying someone in cyberspace. It is not the place where the bullying takes...

Writing Feedbackmyra95 - Nov 12, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
How Technology affects us

2 - The thesis paragraph has a solid base, but lacks the actual presentation of the discussion topic. That is what...

Writing FeedbackIsabellaaaa - Nov 12, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
Motivational letter for CERN Summer Student Programme: revision ideas

2 - You do not need to mix your academic history into the motivational letter. The one thing that a motivational...

Lettersniyar - Nov 11, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
Write a definition paragraph of about 150 words to address the following questions: What is freedom?

2 - The essay is more focused on why people want freedom as opposed to defining what freedom is. The question...

Writing Feedbackkimyun_05 - Nov 11, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
china's one child policy has been carried out successfully

2 - 129 words is an unacceptable number of words for a task 1 presentation. It does not meet the minimum...

Writing Feedbacktuanh24 - Nov 10, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
TASK 1 - percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, town, rural areas

2 - Incorrect sentence structure. You are indicating that only 2 years are to be compared in the image. However,...

Writing Feedbackjackhoang - Nov 10, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
FIT Admissions Essay - Undergraduate - Fashion Design

2 - You cannot focus on your qualifications that will make you an excellent candidate for FIT alone. You also need...

Undergraduatechloieroupe - Nov 9, 2023Holt - Nov 19, 2023
The Benefits of curb as a Waste Diversion Program in the City of Peoria

2 - This reference should come later in the opinion paper. Possibly in the 2nd or 3rd paragraph. You have...

Research PapersRborquez6500 - Nov 9, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
Definition paragraph . Define the word ' solidarity ' and give your own perspective

2 - I think you meant to refer to "community" as in the place where the solidarity is taking place?...

Writing FeedbackLOIDAT - Nov 9, 2023Holt - Nov 25, 2023
UBC Personal Profile - What is important to you? And why? "Photography"

3 - @Holt Hi, is there a way to private message you on here? Not here, but you may email: essayforum.com+holt@gmail.com...

Undergraduateyooogiis - Nov 6, 2023Mav47 - 15 hrs ago
Motivation letter for International Master's program in Neuroscience (NeuroBIM)

3 - Thank you for your feedback, I will revise the essay accordingly, but about my scientific publication, since I will...

Lettersminhsym1341 - Nov 5, 2023minhsym1341 - Nov 9, 2023
Happiness levels increased in developing nations compared to declining levels in developed one

2 - Your prompt restatement did not include the basis for the happiness of both sectors, which is economic growth (financual...

Writing Feedbackhuyenmy2612 - Nov 5, 2023Holt - Nov 21, 2023
IELTS task 2 - the most important environmental problems

2 - Do not focus on a particular country or form of governance. This is a generalized discussion topic so...

Writing Feedbackjjwon - Nov 5, 2023Holt - Nov 21, 2023
The chart below depicts the way families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018

2 - The report does not meet the minimum 150 word requirement. There will be a small percentage deducted from the...

Writing Feedbackadwdhkkn - Nov 5, 2023Holt - Nov 19, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 1: bar chart about computer ownership

2 - The writer has a relaxed and comfortable writing style. Reading it made me feel as if you just took...

Writing Feedbacknghn_thyyannh - Nov 4, 2023Holt - Nov 19, 2023
PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR BIOLOGICAL SCIENCE BACHELOR DEGREE

2 - Since this is a personal statement, you should make an effort to balance out the information you provide about...

Undergraduatealexdo - Nov 4, 2023Holt - Nov 5, 2023
W Task 2: The necessity of schools in providing knowledge for students

2 - Your opinion is well presented but, lacking in more depth so as to increase your score. You need to...

Writing Feedbackhuonggiang206 - Nov 3, 2023Holt - Nov 5, 2023
Cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourist

2 - The essay will get a failing task accuracy score in terms of paraphrasing considerations. That is because you decided...

Writing FeedbackMihnie21 - Nov 3, 2023Holt - Nov 5, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] - Music - opinion essay

2 - While you did write a very flowery restatement, it missed the mark for most counts in relation to the...

Writing Feedbackchau_pham - Nov 2, 2023Holt - Nov 5, 2023
Talk about your career in future

3 - I think it would be better if you could elaborate what kind of aspects that you want to learn...

Undergraduatenganhoang - Nov 2, 2023kokor0 - Nov 18, 2023
Music helps to create an environment without barrier for people to understand more about each other

3 - I notice the use of academic vocabulary in the first 3 paragraphs. However, improvements still need to be made...

Writing Feedbackhannie286 - Nov 2, 2023chau_pham - Nov 2, 2023
Letter of Motivation for Admission to the BBA Program at KU Leuven

4 - hi! i am not a professional but i just want to share with you some of my thoughts about...

LetterssaqibM - Nov 2, 2023nghn_thyyannh - Nov 4, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 2 - topic about crime prediction

3 - thank you so much for checking my essay! i deeply appreciate your effort. I just want to clarify that...

Writing Feedbacknghn_thyyannh - Nov 1, 2023nghn_thyyannh - Nov 2, 2023
[IELTS TASK 1 - MAP] - changes in Felix Stone

2 - For starters, you can lower your word count to better suit the 20 minute writing time frame. Learn to...

Writing Feedbackchau_pham - Nov 1, 2023Holt - Nov 1, 2023
In many countries obesity and unhealthy eating habits are increasing. What are the reasons for this?

2 - Avoid such exaggerated references in the restatement. Remember that the original topic is based upon logic. Therefore, only...

Writing Feedbackquynhhoa123 - Oct 31, 2023Holt - Nov 1, 2023
GKS Graduate Nursing Science Feb2024

3 - @Holt Thanks so much for your help, i will adjust my essay following your instruction....

Scholarshipm1lly3 - Oct 31, 2023m1lly3 - Nov 9, 2023
Social Ethical Theories with an Emphasis on Deontology as a preferred solution

NEW - Help me compare and contrast deontology and utilitarianism theories. The aim will be to challenge the differences in...

Essaysbluemaxwell - Oct 31, 2023 -
This is the place where I want to be - Fashion Institute of Technology Admittance Essay

5 - Coming from an aspiring designer myself, I don't think you would enjoy attending FIT. You don't sound very passionate...

Undergraduatekrenkewitz - Oct 30, 2023chloieroupe - Nov 9, 2023