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Cover Letter : IT University of Copenhagen



zer0leet 2 / 3  
Feb 13, 2018   #1

application for Bachelors in Data Science



Feb 09, 2018

International Admissions,
IT University of Copenhagen,
Copenhagen, Denmark.
Sir/Madam,
My name is Diwakar Adhikari and I am from Nepal. I have recently completed my high school and I would like to apply for Bachelors in Data Science in your University. From as long as I can remember I have always loved computers, especially the software bit. It's truly amazing how the combination of two simple binary numbers can produce such a wide array of possible outcomes. The limitless possibilities of programming have always fascinated me.

To be taught in one of the top IT institution world-wide with the best teaching faculty and research opportunities might be everyone's dream, but for me IT University of Copenhagen is much more than that. Apart from providing academic excellence, it will be my platform to engage and interact with a vast and diverse community of students. The Data Science Program course boosted by the opportunity to choose between two possible tracks will not only prepare me to become a better Computer Programmer/Analyst but also make me a sought-after person in the growing market of IT back in my country Nepal. The IT sector in Nepal is still at its infancy and one can see a plain shortage of well trained human resource in this sector. The positive progress in our political arena is now slowly changing the face of development and there is a huge shift from public to private management making a profound scope for everything be it health care, finance to education with reintroduction of IT interventions in each sector. A close look at the course structure and design made me realize that this course will prepare me for the first type of career, giving me all the skills I need to work as a data scientist in the competitive IT industry. Also, the current students' testimonials made me understand how the course allows us to focus on the practical applications of the learning. This would help me not only understand the concept but also give a deeper sense on how it would be applied. Another thing that attracted me to apply to your university was its outstanding student/faculty ratio.

I believe if we do what we love, we will never get tired and always keep growing. I have loved computers and software for as long as I can remember and as I grew up this passion just got stronger. Coding is my yang, I would love to pursue this same field as my career. I have also a few coding experiences in my kitty as a part of my volunteer work after my exams in some local NGOs and private IT institutes in Kathmandu. I am certain that my academic skills and extracurricular activities regarding programming will make me a valuable addition to the bachelors' program in Data science offered at the IT university of Copenhagen.

Thank you in advance for considering my application. I look forward for a positive response from you.
Best regards,
Diwakar Adhikari.

vik0905 2 / 1  
Feb 13, 2018   #2
One thing that i have learned is to never start the essay with a cliche opener. Such as when you said as long as i can remember...

Maybe you could switch it up to "It was through my early years ..."

Other than that, it seems good with reasonable credibility on your experiences.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15411  
Feb 14, 2018   #3
Diwakar, the purpose of a cover letter is to provide a summary of the content of the various essays that you have submitted along with your application packet. That means, you are not supposed to write a narrative essay as you did in this letter. What you did was write a statement of purpose rather than a cover letter. The cover letter should only be used to immediately call the attention of the reviewer to your strongest points as indicated in the other parts of the essays. This is the outline of the most important character traits, student abilities, awards, and motivation for your college degree. It is a summation of all the essays that you wrote. The summation will be used by the reviewer to look for evidence of your claims within your documents and expanded discussions within the relevant essay prompts. Therefore, your cover letter should be revised to indicate the points I have enumerated here. In its current form, the letter does not help to increase the interest of the reviewer in your application because it does not tell him immediately to look for your stand out points in the essays.


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