sntinn 8 / 36 9 Mar 15, 2014 #1Hi all, could you please help me correct my grammar and mistakes on this email. I would like to have it polite as much as possible, but my intention may be fail without the help from you guys. By the way, I appreciate all suggestions or comment----------------------------------------------------------------- ----------------------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------------Dear Grad School AdmissionI am a master degree applicant in XXX Department.As XXX University is highly competitive, I took the GRE score on the XXXth of MONTH, 20XX.I would like to know whether it is possible for me to improve my profile with the new GRE score.Thank you for your consideration.Best Regards,Name
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553 Mar 16, 2014 #2I am a master degree applicant in XXX Department.I am an applicant for the degree program of "?????????" (name of the degree, e.g. Masters in ?????) and I made my application on (date you first submitted it)As XXX University is highly competitive, I took the GRE score on the XXXth of MONTH, 20XX.However, I took the GRE exam again in ???? (month) ???? (year) in hope of improving my chances for obtaining admission to your university with a better GRE score.I would like to know whether it is possible for me to improve my profile with the new GRE score.I shall be thankful if you could let me know whether it is possible to update my previous application with the new GRE score.
