Would be very grateful if anyone could check this Recommendation Letter and improve its context.
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Date: 10 June 2009
Ref: A/1119-09
Recommendation Letter for John Doe
TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN,
It is with great pleasure that I recommend John Doe. I have known him for a year during which his performance working as a Graduate Mechanical Engineer for XYZ Ltd proved that he will be a valuable addition to any company.
John distinguished himself by being enthusiastic, dedicated employee with reliable work habits. He is capable of working under minimum supervision and willingly accepts it when offered. During this period he has proved himself as an efficient employee, who is punctual in planning; meeting deadlines, and conscientiously adheres to company standards and guidelines.
Please do not hesitate to contact us, if you require any further information.
Yours faithfully,
H E,
Executive Director
I assume you mean improve the content (not context) of the letter!
Add a story that illustrates one of the things you have said about John Doe. For example, you say that he works well with a minimum of supervision. Was there a time when he handled an especially difficult problem or project on his own? You say that he is enthusiastic. How was that expressed?
to be honest im trying to get my boss sign this letter , but didnt know what to put in it. Is that a formal Reccom Letter ? or is it just too much ?
I would apreciate it , if you could edit this so it looks more realistic.
What you have written so far is very slight. A strong recommendation gives specific praise in addition to listing the fine qualities of the applicant. I can understand why you'd be uneasy writing such a letter for yourself. If you want to leave this letter as it is, you just need to fix up the grammar.
But here's a question: Why not ask your boss to write you a letter?
I would try to be more specific in your skills and accomplishments. It will be easier for you boss to sign and of more interesting to a prospective employer. I think more importantly it will highlight skills of interest to the new engineering firm.
Not trying to be unkind. but what you have present is only the most basic qualifications of an engineer. You expect that a graduate engineer will come to work everyday and be an efficient employee.
An important note, the prospective employer will want to be able to talk this boss in person to discuss his reference. A letter is nice but anyone could have written it.
Prospective Employer,
It is with....
At XYZ John tasks included
- Lead the development of a left handed monkey wrench (LHMW)
- Calculating the stresses on LHMW in outer space under massive loads
- Coordinated with the right hands monkey wrench on design issues and schedules
- Reduce the cost of LHMW by 75%
You can contact me at .... if you have any questions
Big boss
I assume your boss asked you to write the letter for him. That's a standard time-saving technique people who have to write recommendation letters like to use. It is also unfortunate, because you have to walk a line between praising yourself as much as possible while still keeping the letter realistic enough that your boss will agree to sign it. Still, you are going to have to add some narrative anecdotes that show the qualities you are merely telling at the moment. Try to choose incidents that map on to what you expect the company you are applying to to want to hear.
Hello Everyone,
Thank you All so much for your support.
I have made some changes to the Recom Letter, including a couple of examples and also making it more clear so it addresses the university.
I would be most grateful again, if someone could look into this and review the grammar.
Thank you
Esun
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TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN,
I am writing to you in support of Mr. Esun and his desire to attend Edinburgh University for the BEng Program in Mechanical Engineering.
I have known him for a year during which his performance working as a Graduate Mechanical Engineer for XYZ (U.K.) has proved that he is very enthusiastic and a potential to become a great engineer.
His efficiency in planning projects, and meeting deadlines specifically were proved to me by accomplishing many projects, the two examples are as follows:
1. Successfully Lead the Graduate team in producing a preliminary Acid Gas Removal Report.
2. Successfully updating the Rhum's field economic model (in assistant with the company's commercial analyst) well within the time limit.
I enthusiastically recommend Mr. Esun as an applicant to Edinburgh University and appreciate your facilitation in accepting his admission to your university.
Please do not hesitate to contact me, if you require any further information.
Yours faithfully,
I am writing to you in support of full name
I have known Mr. Esun for a year
His efficiency in planning projects and meeting deadlines specifically were proved to me by accomplishing many projects.the two examples are as follows:For example, he s uccessfully led the Graduate team in producing a preliminary Acid Gas Removal Report. Mr. Esun also s uccessfully updated the Rhum's field economic model (in collaboration with the company's commercial analyst) well within the time limit.
Thank you very much EF-Simone ,,,
***YOU ARE a STAR***
Instead of the 1, 2 list, perhaps you could integrate your examples into the preceding paragraph, and elaborate a bit on what a great job you did in each case (being as specific as possible).