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Mechanical engineering program offered by faculty of engineering in university of Debrecen


mhamedab 1 / 1  
Jan 10, 2021   #1

motivation letter for an BSc in mechanical engineering



Dear Sir, Madam,
I am writing to apply for a Bachelor of Science degree program in Mechanical engineering offered by faculty of engineering in university of Debrecen. I would like to enroll in Autumn session of 2020.

Since I was a child, I was always fascinated by how a mechanical machine works and execute a particular function. Moreover, I was consistently thrilled by how a complex machine works and traying disassemble its parts then to reassemble them again. In fact, since my early childhood, developing and building my own vehicle was my dream that still resonates within me, I enjoyed the idea of utilizing science that I learned (High school, Institute) to design and make a particular mechanical part. I was further stimulated when I began to learn about fluid dynamics, computer aided designs and thermodynamics. That led me to realize that I have always wanted to study things that involve in transportation and energy sector, in order to make practical utilization in development of various things. Thus, choosing this distinct field of study was a decision based on passion and interest in the profession I would enjoy doing the most.

However, some reasons made me more particular about my choice. Firstly, the background that I have gained in this discipline as a result of my ongoing study in my institute. Secondly, Mechanical engineers play an important role in many fields (automotive, aerospace, energy...), Thirdly, the continual challenge, as I am expected to discover, invent and develop innovative products which are energy efficient, reliable and environmentally sustainable. Fourthly. I am interested in studying in Hungary because it is an area with historic urban centers, a picturesque landscape, and a flourishing culture. Moreover, the Hungarian higher education has a considerable history and strong traditions with institutions operating for hundreds of years. Furthermore, the foremost reason why I really want to study in Hungary because this country is the land of inventors in various fields such as Donát Bánki and János Csonka who invented the carburetor for a stationary engine and Ottó Bláthy invented the modern electric transformer.

I am confident that the faculty of Engineering in Debrecen would be an excellent start of an exciting engineering career. For improving my education in engineering and preparing to start a career with confidence thus, faculty of Engineering in Debrecen is the most appropriate choice for me. Moreover, your institution has a good ranking which makes it even more attractive as a choice for undergraduate studies.

certainly, the global warming is one of the greatest environmental threats facing the world, thus my duty as a mechanical engineer is to enhance the energy and transportation sector (which represent 73.2% of the global greenhouse gas emission) as well as come up with new solutions to generate and store energy more efficiently along with manufacturing vehicles with zero greenhouse emission.

Upon returning to Tunisia, I will utilize my undergraduate skills and knowledge to prepare to launch a project to help fight climate change as well as creating a business about that project therefore improving my country environmentally and economically.

While studying in foreign country is a very nice thing to do it's not without some challenges such as getting used to a new culture also, I might have a communication problem in the first few months.

In conclusion, I would like to reconfirm that I am eager to gain new experiences, improve my skills and Broaden my understanding of the dynamic engineering world.

Thank you very much for considering my application.
Yours faithfully,
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,194 3644  
Jan 12, 2021   #2
The motivational letter cannot start with a childhood interest. If you had said an interest that developed as a teenager, then that would be more acceptable. The first paragraph is totally incorrect and cannot be presented in this essay. You have not established a development of your interest in this major based upon your STEM subjects and theoretical learning that could prove to support the career path you want to take. Remove the information in the parenthesis. Focus on a particular field of mechanical engineering you are motivated to study instead. The motivational letter should not be a personal statement, which is what the first half of your presentation is. So you have to revise that to have a motivational focus instead. Read the various samples here. Those should help guide you towards a more appropriate motivational letter.
OP mhamedab 1 / 1  
Jan 14, 2021   #3
thank you very much for reading and evaluating my essay
but the scholarship website demand that i must answer these question in my motivation letter that's why it appear like a personal statement:
-Why have I chosen to apply to this programme?
-Why did you apply to study in Hungary?
-What do I expect to gain from my studies?
-Why does my background make me a suitable candidate?
-How will the programme help me to achieve my goals?
-How does your proposed study relate to a particular development challenge or need at the global, national, and/or local level?
-How will you apply your new skills and qualifications when you return home?
-What challenges would you expect to encounter while studying in a foreign country, and how could you prepare for these challenges?
kMIHA 1 / 1  
Jan 18, 2021   #4
Hello, @mhamedab,

I would advise you to develop further your response to the second half of questions, the ones you posted as a comment underneath. You have discussed the first four questions in detail but you have merely answered the last four, especially ,,How will you apply your new skills and qualifications when you return home?" and ,,What challenges would you expect to encounter while studying in a foreign country, and how could you prepare for these challenges?". It is visible how the first paragraphs are much longer than the latter. Moreover, I think it would be more pleasant for the reader if your structure is neater.

Good luck with your application!


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