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Nepal education - Motivation letter for scholarship



randooi 1 / -  
Oct 22, 2025   #1
When an earthquake struck my hometown in Nepal in 2024, I watched buildings collapse: structures that were meant to protect lives, including some built by companies that prioritized speed over safety. Helping rebuild homes with my father's construction team forced me to confront a truth I couldn't ignore. Growth without responsibility isn't progress; it's negligence disguised as success. That moment reshaped my purpose and set me on the path toward the Erasmus Mundus Master in Impact Entrepreneurship (EMMIE).

My academic journey began with a fascination for how technology and economics intersect to create change. I earned a Bachelor of Technology in Computer Science and Engineering with a minor in Financial Economics from KIIT University, India. This combination trained me to think analytically and understand how innovation and financial sustainability can work together. My published paper, "Fraud Detection in Financial Institutions Using Machine Learning," reinforced my passion for applying data-driven solutions to systemic inefficiencies.

After graduation, I returned to Nepal and joined my family's construction company as a project manager. I led digitalization projects that improved operational efficiency and transparency, but I soon realized the industry's deepest challenges required more than technical fixes. They demanded moral clarity and systemic thinking. The 2024 earthquake confirmed this. In its aftermath, dozens of families lost their homes. Our company built and donated three homes, then partnered with the international NGO Human Development and Community Services (HDCS) to build twenty-one more, restoring shelter for over 120 people. Handing over those keys remains the most defining moment of my life. In a region where infrastructure determines survival, I learned that entrepreneurship is fundamentally about restoration: rebuilding not just structures, but trust, dignity, and community resilience.

EMMIE's focus on developing entrepreneurs who design scalable solutions to social and environmental challenges aligns perfectly with my own. The program's pedagogical approach, rooted in experiential learning, business simulations, and industry collaboration, mirrors how I've learned best: through practice, iteration, and real-world problem-solving.

Coming from South Asia's construction sector with technical and post-disaster experience, I hope to contribute a perspective that enriches the cohort's diversity. I am already practicing impact entrepreneurship, and I am seeking the tools and frameworks to scale it responsibly while learning from global best practices. At ZSEM, I plan to prototype sustainable construction ventures and validate their financial models through the incubation program. At ISM University, I will refine impact measurement and social entrepreneurship frameworks to assess housing resilience and community inclusion. At HEC Liège, I aim to learn how to attract impact investors and build partnerships that can scale green materials and circular economy practices in Nepal and beyond. By translating lessons from Europe's impact entrepreneurship ecosystem to South Asia's infrastructure context, I hope to develop a scalable model for responsible construction that balances growth with dignity.

My long-term goal is to transform my family business into Nepal's first fully sustainable construction company, one where every project plants trees, reuses materials, and rebuilds trust. In a country where reconstruction often overshadows resilience, I want to prove that business can rebuild dignity as well as homes. This vision directly addresses sustainable urbanization and climate resilience, priorities central to both Nepal's development needs and global sustainability goals.

The EMMIE program offers more than education; it offers the structure, rigor, and community I need to turn local impact into systemic change. I bring to the cohort not just ambition, but evidence: 24 homes built, 120 lives sheltered, and a construction company already mid-transformation. Through EMMIE, I seek the frameworks to scale this work responsibly, the expertise to measure impact rigorously, and the partnerships to ensure these solutions endure beyond a single generation.
Thank you for considering my application.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Oct 22, 2025   #2
The way that you discuss your education in the essay is confusing. You are from Nepal but you studied in India. Your family is in the construction business, but you are trying to connect that to entreprenueurship, which are not related lines of study or business. The first paragraph is a forced connection between the two that the reviewer will see and consider that the application you are submitting is not for the correct line of study.

When you mention that you are a published author, you need to provide the name of the publication, series, and publication date. The reviewer will want to double check on that information, as they always do.

I do not really see the reviewers taking your application seriously because of the unrelated lines of study and information about your plans which do not truly align with the masters studies that you wish to cover. You need to find a better way of connecting your construction background with the entrep course that you wish to study. Right now, this essay is well written, but does not work for the purpose intended.


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