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Dear Reader,
This year has been very insightful. I think I actually learned something - and I don't mean to make that sound offending but I think this is one of the few classes where I actually felt a change. And it reflects when I read things: if it's good I'll be able to do a better analysis and point out the author's technique and if it's trash I won't be able to read past the first two pages.
In terms of my writing, I see the difference throughout. I think I definitely write with more substance than I use to. I see the improvement ad the progress when I look back and see my plot oriented work versus my recent work that's more developed in analysis of literary technique and use of literary terms.
I feel more confident about my writing and I think I'm able to express myself better these days through writing - there were times where I felt so restricted on what to write that I didn't know how to word things. I definitely feel more competent about what I write, especially poetry which made me want to cry every time I had to annotate.
I realize that our class got more work than those of the other AP English classes but even though there were nights where I wanted to throw myself out the window because of the work we had to do...it did pay-off.
But what I personally value above all else from your class - not the writing or the reading or the understanding of literary works - but my participation. I swear to god, your class has been one of the few classes where I'll open my mouth and say something. It's a class that I fear (I do cross my fingers that you're in a good mood when I walk in) but it's also a class I look forward to because it's one of the only classes where I feel secure about what I'm going to say when I raise my hand. You can ask anyone from your ninth period class who had Mr. Baldwin or you could even ask Mr. Baldwin himself, I barely ever spoke. I might have raised my hand like a total of five times that entire year - although it might have had to do with the fact that I really thought Mr. Baldwin was God and that I wasn't smart enough to say anything of substance.
In your class, even though you sometimes make faces at our retarded answers or lash-out when we say something that isn't relevant, I feel less inhibited and comfortable with voicing my ideas and responses. Though I like politics and history, I only spoke three words the entire two years that I had AP U.S. History and though I loved Mr. Baldwin's class and his lectures, I only raised my hand a good five or six times. Your class is fun...from a masochist perspective. I got to say things I often don't voice and I've been able to grow analytically from it.
All I can say is that as a teacher you've done a pretty awesome job. Just don't scare the kids too often (that's why they're less likely to participate) and it's all good.
I've divided this portfolio in sections that I thought I showed good improvement and which I thought I progressed most throughout the year. I admit to including mostly essays but my motives for doing that lie in the fact that I truly believe that everything - the amount of classwork, my participation, and my individual growth is reflected in these essays. All the work I have done this year is eventually embedded into an essay and that's what I believe really demonstrated my progress -my ability to put the things I learned together.
I'm not going to say I hope you enjoy reading my revised work as much as I enjoyed writing it because I didn't really have any fun doing it since I had to look at my old work that was just really sad and depressing at how much it sucked.
So instead, I hope you're in a good mood while you're doing my portfolio so that you won't throw it outside your window and have it accidentally injure some poor soul who was walking by in the middle of Park Slope.
Yours truly,
Cindy
Thanks!
Dear Reader,
This year has been very insightful. I think I actually learned something - and I don't mean to make that sound offending but I think this is one of the few classes where I actually felt a change. And it reflects when I read things: if it's good I'll be able to do a better analysis and point out the author's technique and if it's trash I won't be able to read past the first two pages.
In terms of my writing, I see the difference throughout. I think I definitely write with more substance than I use to. I see the improvement ad the progress when I look back and see my plot oriented work versus my recent work that's more developed in analysis of literary technique and use of literary terms.
I feel more confident about my writing and I think I'm able to express myself better these days through writing - there were times where I felt so restricted on what to write that I didn't know how to word things. I definitely feel more competent about what I write, especially poetry which made me want to cry every time I had to annotate.
I realize that our class got more work than those of the other AP English classes but even though there were nights where I wanted to throw myself out the window because of the work we had to do...it did pay-off.
But what I personally value above all else from your class - not the writing or the reading or the understanding of literary works - but my participation. I swear to god, your class has been one of the few classes where I'll open my mouth and say something. It's a class that I fear (I do cross my fingers that you're in a good mood when I walk in) but it's also a class I look forward to because it's one of the only classes where I feel secure about what I'm going to say when I raise my hand. You can ask anyone from your ninth period class who had Mr. Baldwin or you could even ask Mr. Baldwin himself, I barely ever spoke. I might have raised my hand like a total of five times that entire year - although it might have had to do with the fact that I really thought Mr. Baldwin was God and that I wasn't smart enough to say anything of substance.
In your class, even though you sometimes make faces at our retarded answers or lash-out when we say something that isn't relevant, I feel less inhibited and comfortable with voicing my ideas and responses. Though I like politics and history, I only spoke three words the entire two years that I had AP U.S. History and though I loved Mr. Baldwin's class and his lectures, I only raised my hand a good five or six times. Your class is fun...from a masochist perspective. I got to say things I often don't voice and I've been able to grow analytically from it.
All I can say is that as a teacher you've done a pretty awesome job. Just don't scare the kids too often (that's why they're less likely to participate) and it's all good.
I've divided this portfolio in sections that I thought I showed good improvement and which I thought I progressed most throughout the year. I admit to including mostly essays but my motives for doing that lie in the fact that I truly believe that everything - the amount of classwork, my participation, and my individual growth is reflected in these essays. All the work I have done this year is eventually embedded into an essay and that's what I believe really demonstrated my progress -my ability to put the things I learned together.
I'm not going to say I hope you enjoy reading my revised work as much as I enjoyed writing it because I didn't really have any fun doing it since I had to look at my old work that was just really sad and depressing at how much it sucked.
So instead, I hope you're in a good mood while you're doing my portfolio so that you won't throw it outside your window and have it accidentally injure some poor soul who was walking by in the middle of Park Slope.
Yours truly,
Cindy