Street hawking / Transcript - how to start a letter to editor?

a letter to the editor discussing the problems suggesting solutions to the issue of street hawking

Try googling these words; How to write a good letter to the editor. I also think you should google these words; street hawking, arguments. Look at some examples of good letters to the editor, and then you have to replicate that as you write what you read about hawking.

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An email to editor of a journal

Please help me to correct this email to editor of a journal. Thanks in advance

Dear Dr. Shahidi,
Thank you for your E-mail.
Since you have sent me some appropriate comments about my transcript, I want to know is it possible to revise that after a proper study and getting some professors' viewpoints and resend it for your journal?

Since you have sent me some appropriate comments about my transcript,
try:You sent me some comments about my transcript,

I want to know isif it's possible to revise that after a proper study,and getting some professors' viewpoints and also resend it for your journal?