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My debut poem about "Love."


lankasulaim 1 / -  
Aug 21, 2011   #1
Love is so addictive.

It makes your feelings very seductive.

Love comes unexpected.

It doesn't care about self-respect.

Love can inspire you.

It will despair you.

Love makes you go crazy.

It can make you shaky.

Love is so complicated.

It can not be duplicated.

Love can blind your eyes.

It will slide your heart.

Love will not have any logic.

It can make your life full of magic.

Love makes loose your senses.

It will grab any chances.

Love makes you blunder.

It is the ultimate wonder!!!
linmark 2 / 328 7  
Aug 22, 2011   #2
I have to be blunt here - the last line of your poem left me flat out - it was a cliche and I do not believe that helps to make your poem original and impactful! Is that what you intended? Ultimate wonder is not the imagery of your earlier poetry.


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