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"It was Good to Have Known you Sarah" - Poem


Rajiv 55 / 400  
Aug 25, 2008   #1
I met you on this beach of words,
I was moving along and you were curious,
Curious of the movements I made,
Where I looked, where I hopped to.

Perhaps it was just your gentle way,
But slowly my movements were caught by your gaze,
Slowly I was reading from your eyes, your silent gestures,
What I should say, to even say what I may.

Now once again I find myself moving along,
I notice you are not by my side,
Only your encouraging spirit will never leave,
And though I know you acknowledged,
How words are but fetters, of a language,
Our thoughts can rise in any.

What meter, what grammar, what punctuation even,
Someone lives within, lives also without,
You can set Him free, Her free,
Flow not with words of your own,
But from somewhere you'll never ever know.

It was so Good to Have known You Sarah.
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Aug 25, 2008   #2
Good afternoon.

This is a very well thought out poem. What form/structure are you using?

Regards,
Gloria
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OP Rajiv 55 / 400  
Sep 14, 2008   #3
Quite spontaneous actually. I think I may be only trying to keep control of the cadence, to better express my sentiment.

Thank you, and I'm sorry for not acknowledging your comment earlier.

regards,

Rajiv
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Sep 14, 2008   #4
Good afternoon.

In the future, please make sure to include the assignment with your post.

Regards,
Gloria
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asadder - / 2  
Dec 12, 2008   #5
I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme. As for the poem as a whole, it has a lot of potential to become something better. Instead of making it so monotone you could try to introduce more formal writing.

Good Job
Take care.
charliesun 9 / 28  
Jan 3, 2009   #6
It's emotional.I like it!


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