hey i was just wondering if u could give me some help on how 2 write.
a monologue intro on a love poem
i am a bit stuck on it
i dont know how 2 write in a sentence
about how the seperation of powers become when they divorce
like for example a love poem. a girl leaving a guy
coz he treated her bad.
tnx for all ur suport :)
hope 2 hear from u soon
I'm not sure what you want here. It's not that you want help with the love poem itself, but with an intro to it? And the intro itself has to be a monologue? Or do you just want an opening line or two for the poem, which you are saying should have only one speaker? Please clarify.
What do you mean by "separation of powers"?
I invested a part of myself in a system that served me well for some time. It consisted of me and my beloved. Now that the system has come apart, I know that I am better off, but that does not change the fact that a part of my self is now missing.
By the way, Braja, you have a cool name!!!
hey sorry for the late reply been bussy
umm yer i did the assignment
ill see how ill go
tnx any way :)
hehe
You can still post your draft here if you'd like. It might be too late to make changes to improve your mark, but you still might learn something from the feedback you get that will help you on future assignments.
Suppresed Love, poem
Suppresed Love
I can not be near you
When I want to
I know you feel
the same way too
Never say no!
because I know
And you Know I Know
You should consider removing the exclamation mark, which can sometimes seem a little elementary. The ending seems quite vague too, but overall an interesting, if not slightly short poem.
oh - also can not may sound better if the two words were joined :-- cannot
I can't improve this! It's excellent. I hear it playing as a song with a fast base line but lyrics sung slowly.
Play it in the key of A minor!
:-)
