Hey guys, I have never written a mock ode before. I am not strong at poetry and I want to learn to be a good poetry writer. Any comments or edit is highly appreciated. Thank you.
"Ode to my Ran Away Dog"
Maddie Maddie,
Medium size husky
White fur, blue eyes, my bestie
One morning, clear sky
I woke up naturally without you licking my face
Walked down stairs, doors were open and you were gone
Searched everywhere, looked every corner, no sign of your face
Emotions filled with storm rain and can't move on.
Tic toc tic toc,
Four years passed
Thank you Maddie, I learned how to be independent
Thank you Maddie, I learned how wake up by myself
Thank you Maddie, I learned how to cheer myself up
Thank you Maddie, I learned how to protect myself
Thank you Maddie, I learned how to smile on my own.
But
Why if
I don't want to learn anything
I don't want to be independent
I don't want to be able to wake myself up
I don't want to cheer myself up
I don't want to protect myself
I don't want to smile on my own.
All I want is,
You to be by my side
Protect me,
Wake me up,
Cheer me up,
Protect me,
Make me smile.
My ode my belief
No need to move on,
What you missed in life
You will always missed them
No need to move on,
Life is all about
What you make your experiences
Become everlasting memories
Thank you,
Maddie.
I'm not completely familiar with odes, but I'll try my best to help!
To Protect me,
To Wake me up,
To Cheer me up,
To Protect me,
To Make me smile.
I feel like adding the 'to' would make this stanza much better.
What you make Making your experiences
Become everlasting memories
It's a very well written poem, considering poetry is really hard to write (at least for me!) and it's a strong poem showcasing how important dogs can be in people lives, good job!
Hi Ethan, below are my corrections to yoem
3rd stanza
But
WhyWhat if...
Last stanza
My ode, my belief
You will always missed themwill never bring back
Will b ecome everlasting memories
There you have it Ethan, as you can see, there's not much to correct in your essay, this is because, it is fairly written, though some of the words does not really rhyme with the previous one, but as you said, this is not your strong points, however, the best about you is that you still tried to pursue writing the poem, this shows your determination to be good at the craft and this is what matters most.
I hope to review more of your essays, poems and writing articles soon and I hope this remarks helped.
